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PostSubject: Arcide   Fri Nov 06, 2009 9:19 pm

Name: Arcide Darkknight

Know As: Shinggaku,son (his parrents call him that)

persanality: hes a peacfull person but when its time for him to fight or fight back or deffend something hes always remand calm.he also wise so anytime that you talk hes willing to listenand tell an awnser that might be clear to you in a dayor something.

abilitys: super human strength he can lift a 10 ton truck easly
super human speed he can ran up to 100 miles per hour
super human sent he can smeel thing a mile away
healing power he can heal himself almost instantaniesly but he can regenerate an arm or leg or head or bone but he can heal his bone
and super human hearing he can he things be hind him

Age: 15

Gender:male

Species: human but he has the blood of a wearwolf

parints:his father is a wear wolf and his mother was a human

parents history: When his father and a group of scouts were looking for suplise wood,and also food.but all of a sudden his group was attacked by a drider and half of his group was either eaten bythe drider.Or takenby some of the spiders before he was about to attack a spider he heard a womens screams and saw a butifull goddess with blond hair. She was getting attack by one of the spider so he stop his earlyer attack to save the girl.You could say that they fell in love at first sight but after that day they fell in love and got marryed and had the very first half bread werewolf

Siblings:unknown

Clan: he belongs with the wolf tribe

weapons:he has a sword it has wolf pow on the handle part thatattaches to the blade and to the handle and its 5 foot long and 5 inches wide and 3inch thick.and he also has a six calaber gun 1/2 a foot long and 5 inches and 1 inch thick and it shoots 20 inch bullets

what he looks: he has durty blond hair,he has a scar on his left ribe and the left side of his face,hes 6'2 with a 6 pack,but sometime you can't see his face becouse hes always wearing that metalic mack that has a huge gash on the face plate.and also he wears an armer suit that also has a black durty cap that is attach to the suit.


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PostSubject: Re: Arcide   Fri Nov 06, 2009 11:11 pm

Frankly this is the best Parody Stu I've ever seen, my congratulations to Shin for brightening up my day. I was starting to think that Felarya was needing a parody stu to provide comical adventures but this is well beyond anything I could have done Very Happy. I really love the weapons, a sword thats 3 inch thick (a club) and a 6 cal gun which sound sto me like what I'd put on a battleship Razz. Well done good sir!
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PostSubject: Re: Arcide   Fri Nov 06, 2009 11:15 pm

thank you very much so you think it needs work or what becouse some people said it still needs alot of work
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PostSubject: Re: Arcide   Sat Nov 07, 2009 2:28 am

You have a 15 year old who is already a hero. He's peaceful, yet willing to fight. He's wise, a good listener, and apparently smarter than everyone around him. Add in all those superhuman abilities and I'm not sure how you intend to use him.

You mentioned his parents and his wolf tribe - why not expand on that? How did his werewolf father meet his human mother? What are his parents like? What was his upbringing like? What is the tribe like? Where do they live? What is his background? What is his personality? What does he like to do? Does he have any friends? There are literally hundreds of things you could work on that do not revolve around how powerful or awesome he is.

Concentrate on these things. Think about him as a person first, not as a bunch of powers and equipment.

Consider dropping or reducing most of those superhuman abilities. Are they really necessary? And rethink the equipment. I'm not sure how firing 20 inch bullets out of a 6 inch long gun is even possible.
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PostSubject: Re: Arcide   Sat Nov 07, 2009 4:12 am

isn't if fine if you intend to use him for parody stuff though?
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PostSubject: ummm   Sat Nov 07, 2009 4:14 am

Can't we just give him a minigun? or better yet a gauss turret?
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PostSubject: Re: Arcide   Sat Nov 07, 2009 10:12 am

Why does he need a minigun when he already has what seems like a battleship strapped to his back Very Happy
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PostSubject: Re: Arcide   Sat Nov 07, 2009 9:44 pm

ok 1 i didn't mention how cool or anything and 2 i didn't mention how smart he is all i said was he was a good listiner and usally wise with word or apinions
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PostSubject: Re: Arcide   Sat Nov 07, 2009 9:45 pm

Wildthing wrote:
Why does he need a minigun when he already has what seems like a battleship strapped to his back Very Happy


well its not a battle ship though its just a sword that is 5 foot long
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PostSubject: Re: Arcide   Sat Nov 07, 2009 9:48 pm

EliteCreature wrote:
Can't we just give him a minigun? or better yet a gauss turret?


no actualy that wouldn't be far with others if i had a mini gun or a gass turret
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PostSubject: Re: Arcide   Mon Nov 09, 2009 10:19 pm

Archmage_Bael wrote:
isn't if fine if you intend to use him for parody stuff though?


and what do you mean parody stuff?
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PostSubject: Re: Arcide   Tue Nov 10, 2009 12:17 am

Definition: Parody

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PostSubject: Re: Arcide   Tue Nov 10, 2009 1:25 pm

vegeta002 wrote:
Definition: Parody


oh that parody?
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