(I know they don't come from Felarya, but I wanted to add my own Naga's race. Ha'mara is the name of their world)

Common Name: Spirit Naga
Proper Name: Genki Naga (Genki is Japanese for Spirit)
Homeworld: Ha'mara (not in Felarya, but at least one has crossed over)
Element: Life Force
Gender ratio: 60/40 (Male/Female)
Threat Rank: Very Low, Critical when angry (they don't eat others, but are very powerful)

// NAME
Their name does not come from being a spirit or anything like that, it comes from their ability to harness their life-force (spirit) the way others would magic.

// HOME
Spirit Naga's are not native to Felarya, with only one ever appearing in Felarya in known history. Their home, called Ha'mara, is much different to Felarya in several respects. All races peacfully co-exist with each other, with the alliance between the Humans, Fairies & Spirit Naga's being the strongest relationship. Violence is virtually non-existant and no inhabitant eats any meat unless it is already dead at the time. Eating a living thing is considered the highest of all sins. They often mix with the other races from their world, as in they have many friends from many species. As for the name, Ha'mara is the name a Bajoran religious festival to celebrate the arrival of the Emissary. To anyone unfamilier with them, their culture could seem to be a matriarchy as the females often tend to be leaders while the males are usually soldiers/explorers. There is gender equality but many tend to choose particular jobs, allowing this mistaken impression.

// HISTORY
Originally, their world was like most others with different species hunting each other until a few thousand years ago when a few members of several species formed a religion in an attempt to change the culture of their race's. The religion itself only lasted a few centuries, but the values of that religion, along with it remaining loyal followers, began influencing the newer generations allowing them to slowly change the general society at large. The end result is that their past as peredators is largely forgotten.

// RELATION TO OTHER RACES
Though all races in Ha'mara co-exist, little interaction happens between most races. Spirit Naga's get along better with the Humans than fairies, while Fairies prefer human company over Naga's. Most Naga's don't really meet other races, normally staying within their territory and rarely leaving to see other races, while the fairies often travel. Naga's usually see fairies as perculiar and humans as interesting while Naga's themselves are usually seen as the main guardians, dealing with non-magical threats. This gets them respect and are not seen as a threat. As there are no Dridders in Ha'mara, the Spirit Naga's have no particular hatred of them.

Close friendships exist between many from all races as many humans and fairies travel alot. Insterspecies relationships past friendship is common for many races, such as the completly humanoid ones, except Naga's (it's not like you need to be a Rocket scientist to figure out why). Only a few from some of the species know that many in Ha'mara used to prey on the smaller species and this information is closely guarded so it doesn't upset the relations between races.

// PERSONALITY
Peaceful, friendly and generally very helpful. Unless you are a predator, then they might purposefully hinder your hunts, though not directly. They are, to a certain extent, almost pacifists, in that they will only fight in self-defence. They can easily be considered the only genuinly harmless species of Naga, despite being large and powerful. They are very unlikely to get along with the Felaryan predators due to diet and moral differences. The one Spirit Naga that has been to Felarya shows little other than contempt for any Felaryan Naga, choosing only to really talk to humans, nekos and the other race that are normally considered prey. Their personality and diet was originaly the same as a Felaryan Naga, but a religious movement was created to change that. Though the religion faded thousands of years ago, the values gradualy seeped into the culture of all races to the point that they cannot remember a time that they were predators. One of their racial quirks is an intrest in purple things.

// APPEARANCE
In terms of their looks, a Spirit Naga is like most other types, Snake lower half and Human upper half. Unlike most other types, however, there is no variation in some repects. They all have spiked golden blond hair that sticks upward often with bangs hanging down over their face. They will also always have emerald eyes with Gold/orange scales. These traits are for both male and female versions. Many have a high opinion of them because their hair and scales, aside from the obvious gold coloring, also reflect light exactly the same way as gold would if not better while causing them to glow in the presence of virtually any light (a source of annoyance), not unlike angels except only their hair and scales are affected. No one really knows why they glow, their hair and scale are reflective but the glow is very bright no matter how dim the light is, the only time they won't glow is in absolute darkness. The have fangs like any species of Naga, though they are mainly considered more attractive than useful, with the longer fangs and brighter scale/hair shine being considered highly attractive.

// GENDER NUMBERS
Unlike the Naga's in Felarya, the Gender seperation in Spirit Naga's in 60% male, 40% female.

// ABILITIES
Unlike the magic wielding Naga's of Felarya, Sprit Naga's also posess no magical abilities of any kind. Instead of magic, they have evolved a natural affinity for channelling their life-force into attacks the same way magicians would channel magic into spells. The most common use of their abilities is to channel the power into a blast from the mouth. There are rumors that they posess the ability to drain the life-force from others to increase their own abilities, but this is denied and considered absurd by the Naga's themselves. They are the most powerful race in Ha'mara and can use that same energy to increase their already exceptional physical abilities. Though they don't have any magic, they do know of it and can resist but that resistance will usually be lower than a dedicated magical defence. As they used to be preadators liie Felarya Naga's they will likely have many similar abilities, such as being able to unhinge their jaw or poisionus fangs, etc. These abilties have fallen out of use, though, except fangs which are considered an attractive trait.

On the subject of energy manipulation, though all are capable of it to some extent, the majority of the species can only use it to increase their physical strength, speed, agility, etc. Only a few are skilled enough to use the energy in direct attacks, including the most talented of the species (mainly it is only the soldiers that are trained to do this, though explorers also have enough training to protect themselves). It is normally kept that way because violence on their is rare and the power isn't often needed. A group of several Spirit Naga's can combine their power into one attack, with the power of the combined attack depeding on the power of the individual Naga's and how many there are taking part.

// WEAKNESSES
They have several weak points. The first is magic, like almost any Ki user they have no skill with magic and find it harder to protect themselves than a magic user would, though they have a somewhat basic defence it is not as capable as a specific, dedicated protection. The second is that they can only use so much at one time before risking serious damage to themselves, only one ever managed to overcome this and it caused new problems to appear, and they were not pretty. While they are physically stronger than a normal Naga, they suffer somewhat in agility and Ki can only help so much before the second weakness starts to work. Another weakness they have is a lack of night vision, it could their home doesn't have a night or because their body will always glow brightly whenever light (even when the only light comes from a tiny flame torch) is present, negating the need for it to evolve. Though not a unique weakness, their senses can be exploited like any other (such as a loud noice for a distraction).

// DIET
They all are believed vegetarian because they are virtually never seen eating a living person. Spirit Naga's would consider eating anything living a sin and would only eat meat if it was already dead.

// RACIAL STATISTICS
The Average Statistics for a Male:
Height: 100 foot
Poputation: 60%
Life span: 523 years (in a normal place)
Typical Roles: Explorers, Soldiers, Diplomats
Advantages: Slightly greater strength & senses

The Average Statistics for a Female:
Height: 80 foot
Poputation: 40%
Life span: 562 years (in a normal place)
Typical Roles: Leaders, Scientists
Advantages: Slightly more intelligent

Known Spirit Naga's in Felarya:
Ha'dara (My character)

Cool you have created sayen naga

Some remarks they are not really original but very common and classical.

I will quote some of your sentences.

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Instead of magic, they have evolved an ability to channel their lefe-force into attacks the same way magicians would channel magic into spells. The most common use of their abilities is to channel the power into a blast from the mouth.

This abilities is common to any nagas because they are using their power in the same ways. And in general is a basic for anyone who do Ki or shakkra manupulation.

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There are rumors that they posess the ability to drain the life-force from others to increase their own abilities, but this is ignored and considered absurd. They are the most powerful race in Ha'mara and can use that same energy to increase their already exceptional physical abilities. Though they don't have any magic, they do know of it and can resist but that resistance will usually be lower than a dedicated magical defence.

Vampirism abilities are very common.

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Peaceful, friendly and generally very helpful. Unless you are a predator, then they might purposefully hinder your hunts, though not directly. They are, to a certain extent, almost pacifists, in that they will only fight in self-defence. They can easily be considered the only genuinly harmless species of Naga, despite being large and powerful. They are very unlikely to get along with the Felaryan predators due to diet and moral differences. The one Spirit Naga that has been to Felarya shows little other than contempt for any Felaryan Naga, choosing only to really talk to humans, nekos and the other race that are normally considered prey.

Some predators have this kind of personality without to be necessary to belong to this race.

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As mentioned before (in the 'home' section) all are vegetarian and eating a living thing is a sin. Therefore, no Spirit Naga would consider eating anything living and would be very reluctant to eat something dead.

This things describe more a society than a race.

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Advantages: Slightly greater strength & senses

It's very common to people who focuses on on mental or physical abilities.

To sum your idea, you describe a naga with have no affinities with magic but who are focusing on her physical abilities and who are vegetarian. It's a kind of monk naga

It can be interesting for a characters or a society but not as a race.

In addition you based them on the sayen system, so your character will be overpowered even if her abilities are very common, with a very classical personality inherent good or inherent bad

Everything will be a matter of power

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Hmmm... I like these guys and gals. I'll offer more constructive feedback when I've thought about it a bit more, but right now I need to address something that's bugging me. I can get a little obsessive when it comes to languages sometimes, so please don't think I'm picking on you, I just want to clarify things for people who might not know.

vegeta002 wrote:

Genki Naga (Genki is Japanese for Spirit)

The bolded part can be both correct and incorrect, depending on the context. Anyone who is an anime fan or knows a little bit of japanese probably knows what "Genki" means, but for those who don't and might like the word enough to use it in their own works:

Genki never means "Spirit" in the sense of "Ghost" or any other apparition. Instead, it means "Spirit" in the sense that you would call someone "Spirited" or "High-Spirited". The most common translation for Genki is "Guts!"; someone who is "Genki" is considered Healthy, full of stamina, energy, pep, vigor, vitality, and/or courage.

The manner in which vegeta002 used the word is the correct meaning.

If he had used it to describe a race of Naga that were ghostly or otherwise somehow related to spiritual entities, that would have been the incorrect meaning. There are numerous words in Japanese for that kind of spirit; "Genki" is not one of them.

Okay, Japanese lesson is over. Like I said, vegeta002 used the word properly, and obviously knows what it means. I'm not disputing that, just clarifying it for people who might be uncertain. You can apply the word "Genki" to define Crisis, but you can't apply the word "Genki" to define a Ghost... unless it's in relation to that particular ghost's personality. ^^

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I got 'Genki' from 'Genki Dama' which translates into 'Energy Ball/Spirit Ball'. Its the only reason I knew the word. It's also the exact energy they use, but are not as overpowered as their Saiyan originals.

The original post has been altered and the 'Personality' section has a brief explanation of their diet/behaviour toward smaller races.

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Son Goku the monkey king was vicious and destructive too but except here the crown was change to a violent hit on the head.

And I changed this one to an ancient religious movement that altered the society (Well, Crisis would say corrupted).

Basicly, they are like other Naga's except that they adapted with slightly increased physical power and to use their life-force as power to make up for a lack of magic. Then they changed from predators to peaceful partners to due the after effects of a failed religion and their days as predators have long faded from record and memory.

Aside from those little problems, what parts do you like?

The power is common, but some are naturaly adept at using it while others are not (like Ice Nagas, basicly born using magic, while others have to learn). Have you ever wondered why Saiyans have incredible skill at manipulating Ki while still young, whereas Humans usually need years of practice just to get the basics?

I understand your point of view, but the question for me Does a genki naga is different specie of naga or a naga

If they are another specie so a Londerean naga as Katrika is a different specie due to her aptitude to drain magic with her tail to adapt to her surrounding.

But in the universe of Felarya a crossroad many dimensions where many species come from different worlds, does this aptitude make new specie because this aptitude is not different to a capability

So drain magic is a common ability anyone can do that, by example a fire naga can do it with fire.

If a race in a world has this aptitude restrict this ability to this race, so in their homeworld they master Ki instead of magic they are not a kind of naga coming from an alternative universe. But due to the nature of Felarya an aptitude coming from another world becomes a capability because there is a possibilities other nagas or predators share this aptitude but as the same level.

As he present his race their ability to manipulate ki is not a aptitude but a capability. A sayan and a human has both the capability to manipulate their ki except the sayan has a strong potential.

A naga manipulating ki instead of magic can be very interesting and has a strong potential

The manipulation of ki or life force in general is a capability as magic or psionics power. They are different alternative and are not the aptitude to a race.

A fairy can master ki or have psionic power too is not necessary they are only magical user.

@Vegeta002: the idea of your race is not bad but their aptitude is a common ability.

Do you see my point

Edit: The ki energy can be similar to mana. The concept of manipulation of life force is the abilities to draw your power from your own energy and the different living force of the universe. This abilities can be used in different ways, to heal someone, to manipulate an element, to cast a spell, to increase your physical or mental abilities.

A genki naga is a naga who has not affinity with no element and use his life force in the same way their cousin will use their magic.

The saiyans has a strong potential in ki energy, they focuse only on power but the humans due to the fact they are less powerful but they have a better control and mastery. The reason why Goku is the most advanced between the saiyan because he is the first who trains as a human and has a better control of his potential. He has both the power of the saiyans and the control due to the training.

In matter of mastery and manipulation the humans are the best, that's why they are very versatile and can learn many things but the only thing they can not control is the power.

Hmm... an interesting enough idea. But one little thing bugs me, and I'd like to point it out.

The entire race couldn't possibly be 100% vegan.

In the distant future we may see sentient snakes, sentient cats, sentient raptors, sentient dolphins or if we're lucky, sentient insects.

We will NEVER, however, see sentient cows, sentient deer or sentient horses.

The reason is that protein is vital to the brain. Vegetarians themselves are frequently mentally hampered. If the entire race were to drop meat altogether..... well, remember the movie Idiocracy?

Now, since you seem to have created this race specifically for your main character, it seems like a good idea for me to point this out.

I'm sorry, it's just that no one ever acknowledges the fact that meat is essential for brain-development. I mean, hasn't anyone ever wondered why Lisa is the stupidest character in Springfield?