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PostSubject: Need edition help.   Thu Nov 05, 2009 2:46 pm

Hi, guys. I was writing, and long story short, I need a little help.

I've got this problem- I'm a quick thinker, and I can write well over 50 kb a day, but most of what I write is self-indulgent filler that reeks of author tract and inside jokes. No So I need someone who can help me take out the uninteresting parts, keep the good things, and tell me what needs to be re-written. Suspect I mean, yesterday, I was having Hansel and team fight some kensha beasts in Chidokai (I know these things wouldn't last long there... long story...), I had to rewrite the scene three times to make his victory AT LEAST believable, if not acceptable, and it STILL doesn't look right...

I'm very docile and adaptable; does anyone feel up to it? I promise it'll be as easy as I can make it.
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PostSubject: Re: Need edition help.   Sat Nov 07, 2009 4:03 am

I cant, I have the same problems. I also tend to write so fast I leave holes out of not describing stuff. I'd be willing to edit if not for these problems. there area few good people, shady knight on DA, french snack, Fish could probably help you too XD. I wish I could be of further help, I'm sorry :/
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PostSubject: well....   Sat Nov 07, 2009 4:15 am

if i wrote something it would probably be too boring. help
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PostSubject: Re: Need edition help.   Sat Nov 07, 2009 4:18 am

You never know. Try following the rules in the Character thread, looking up something that hasn't been seen (Or seen in a while) in Felarya, and play around with a few ideas. That's what I'm doing right now..
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PostSubject: Re: Need edition help.   Sat Nov 07, 2009 4:18 am

timing2 is another really good editor Very Happy
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PostSubject: i can definatly   Sat Nov 07, 2009 4:53 am

i can definatly edit grammar and tell you if any part of the story gets too wordy...but i doubt you want me writing.
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PostSubject: Re: Need edition help.   Sat Nov 07, 2009 9:36 am

I'd be happy to help. I already proofread & edit for Mdbear84 and ProCaw. Since Mdbear is between stories right now, I've got heaps of spare time (I've got heaps of spare time anyway, so... Yeah :p).
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PostSubject: Re: Need edition help.   Sat Nov 07, 2009 1:59 pm

Anime-Junkie wrote:
I'd be happy to help. I already proofread & edit for Mdbear84 and ProCaw. Since Mdbear is between stories right now, I've got heaps of spare time (I've got heaps of spare time anyway, so... Yeah :p).


Thanks a lot, Vore-Victim. You can begin by telling me if anything's wrong with the second chapter of Hansel VS Felarya... I'll send you the third and fourth chapters, too. Tell me if anything is too boring, too offensive, derailed, or unnecessary, I don't bite Very Happy .
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