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PostSubject: Sapere Aude   Sapere Aude Icon_minitimeWed Jun 30, 2010 4:45 pm

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PostSubject: Re: Sapere Aude   Sapere Aude Icon_minitimeWed Jun 30, 2010 9:47 pm

aethernavale wrote:
Also, anyone know of a way to copy text over with formatting intact? Having to go back through and manually italicize stuff is annoying.

If you set the text-area to "Fancy Text" mode and copy-and-paste from an OpenOffice document into that box in your webbrowser, such things should be transferred automatically. To set the text area to that mode requires that you click the button above the text input box that looks something like this: [A/A]. The button will have a red tone to it if you have done it correctly.
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PostSubject: Re: Sapere Aude   Sapere Aude Icon_minitimeThu Jul 01, 2010 2:16 am

It's starting nicely Smile
Great descriptions and I like how you are introducing the situation, slowly giving hints here and there. I'm curious to see where it will go ^^
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PostSubject: Re: Sapere Aude   Sapere Aude Icon_minitimeThu Jul 01, 2010 2:39 am

Looks good so far. It's well written, well constructed and fairly intriguing.
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PostSubject: Re: Sapere Aude   Sapere Aude Icon_minitimeThu Jul 01, 2010 4:01 am

Your descriptions are gold, I can't critique much at all. This is high tier writing.
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PostSubject: Re: Sapere Aude   Sapere Aude Icon_minitimeFri Jul 02, 2010 10:13 am

For a scene in which not that much happens, you've certainly made it interesting! It builds up quite an atmosphere, while dropping several intriguing hints for the future. I like question-raisers which make it clear there's some fairly detailed information to come later.
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PostSubject: Re: Sapere Aude   Sapere Aude Icon_minitimeFri Jul 02, 2010 11:01 pm

I hesitate to call this a chapter, but this is nevertheless excellent. I enjoy your style of writing. French Snack is right, you are setting up an excellent atmosphere here. The hints are also interesting. It isn't quite a cliff-hanger, but it raises some very intriguing questions.

I did, however find one mistake:

a loch of her dirty blond hair,
Should be
a lock of her dirty blond hair,
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PostSubject: Re: Sapere Aude   Sapere Aude Icon_minitimeSat Jul 03, 2010 4:47 am

Anime-Junkie wrote:
Your descriptions are gold, I can't critique much at all. This is high tier writing.

High tier writing? Pfffttt

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PostSubject: Re: Sapere Aude   Sapere Aude Icon_minitimeSun Jul 04, 2010 1:48 am

Great chapter again Smile
I love how you are slowly building the plot and describing the situation through her eyes. It makes identification with her all the more easier ^_^
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PostSubject: Re: Sapere Aude   Sapere Aude Icon_minitimeMon Jul 05, 2010 3:55 pm

Just read 5 & 6. The quality of the writing is very impressing. I'm really looking forward to the next part.
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PostSubject: Re: Sapere Aude   Sapere Aude Icon_minitimeWed Jul 07, 2010 11:55 pm

Wow, VERY impressive writing- your descriptions and detail are rock solid and makes the story very easy to imagine! I'm glad I've taken the time to read them now...things certainly have gotten interesting from the getgo and I'm really glad that Warismat has managed to comfort Reya especially after seeing her siblings like that... You convery the emotions incredibly strongly with just all of their body language and simple messages to each other. You've got me very hooked man, well done!
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