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| What do you think? | | Godly | | 25% | [ 5 ] | | Excellent | | 40% | [ 8 ] | | Good | | 10% | [ 2 ] | | Meh... | | 10% | [ 2 ] | | ...Don't ever write again... | | 15% | [ 3 ] |
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Raetsu Lord Pichu
Marauder of the deep jungle
Posts : 326
Join date : 2007-12-10
Age : 35
Location : Netherworld of the Usagiyasha
 |  Subject: Heavy Felarya  Fri Dec 14, 2007 7:56 pm | |
| Hm recently got on the bandwagaon and started a Felarya fic, at 1st it was just to see if I could do it, but as I progressed, I really started to enjoy writing about Crisis and the world of Felarya itself. The story itself just follows the adventure of Overlord Jermod, and his vassals Terrance and Slipper who visit Felarya out of curiosity, but they soon realize that the exotic jungle is no place for a 'cheezy field trip'...
Adventure 1: Into The Tropics
Adventure 2: Snakeskin
Adventure 3: True Militant Arrives
Adventrue 4: Ninjinspawn and Kazuma's Folly
Adventure 5: Anko-ism LOL
Adventure 6: Sacrifical Altar to Anko
Adventure 7: So Cold...
Take note, I'm no great writer so anything you guys have to offer as far as suggestions and critique go on ahead, I don't mind it in the least
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Pendragon
Grand Mecha Enthusiast
Posts : 3229
Join date : 2007-12-09
| | Subject: Re: Heavy Felarya Fri Dec 14, 2007 8:24 pm | |
| Though I haven't read all of it, I give it an excellent rating.
Please continue enlightening us with stories. | |
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Ravana3k
Seasoned adventurer
Posts : 178
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Age : 38
Location : Nuremberg
| | Subject: Re: Heavy Felarya Fri Dec 14, 2007 11:03 pm | |
| I'll read it this evening and give you my opinion  | |
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Karbo
Evil admin
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Join date : 2007-12-08
| | Subject: Re: Heavy Felarya Sat Dec 15, 2007 9:54 am | |
| hehe they choose a bad plac for pic nic indeed XD The story is nice and pleaseant to follow, I am curious to see where it will go  | |
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Raetsu Lord Pichu
Marauder of the deep jungle
Posts : 326
Join date : 2007-12-10
Age : 35
Location : Netherworld of the Usagiyasha
| | Subject: Re: Heavy Felarya Sat Dec 29, 2007 7:56 pm | |
| Lol took me forever to get Adventure 4 up, but it's finally done, gawd damn I think my lifespan shortened a little  read n' tell meh what ya think! | |
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Karbo
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| | Subject: Re: Heavy Felarya Mon Dec 31, 2007 6:13 am | |
| I really loved this chapter ! Very nice work on the vore scene with Crisis and Slipper  | |
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Raetsu Lord Pichu
Marauder of the deep jungle
Posts : 326
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Location : Netherworld of the Usagiyasha
| | Subject: Re: Heavy Felarya Tue Jan 01, 2008 8:01 pm | |
| Thanx Karbo, I figured I'd give both Slipper and Crisis some vore action to spice things up a bit. Next installment is in the worx | |
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Karbo
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| | Subject: Re: Heavy Felarya Wed Jan 02, 2008 6:01 am | |
| I am looking forward to it  | |
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Raetsu Lord Pichu
Marauder of the deep jungle
Posts : 326
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Location : Netherworld of the Usagiyasha
| | Subject: Re: Heavy Felarya Sat Feb 09, 2008 10:36 pm | |
| The W8 is over, Adventure 5 is up. Warning it's long O,o | |
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Raetsu Lord Pichu
Marauder of the deep jungle
Posts : 326
Join date : 2007-12-10
Age : 35
Location : Netherworld of the Usagiyasha
| | Subject: Re: Heavy Felarya Sun Apr 27, 2008 2:58 pm | |
| To those who care, I'm actually gonna pick back up on this. Chapter 6 shall be posted as soon as I re-work somethings
Also lolz, I got 2 '...Don't ever write again...' votes...Ironically, I was considering that... | |
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Karbo
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| | Subject: Re: Heavy Felarya Sun Apr 27, 2008 4:10 pm | |
| I am sure looking forward to it and to what will happen with Anko | |
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Rythmear
Survivor
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Age : 35
Location : The place you fear.
| | Subject: Re: Heavy Felarya Sun Apr 27, 2008 11:17 pm | |
| When I saw "heavy Felarya" I thought it was going to be a very moody and heavy toned piece. Turns out I was wrong | |
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Raetsu Lord Pichu
Marauder of the deep jungle
Posts : 326
Join date : 2007-12-10
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Location : Netherworld of the Usagiyasha
| | Subject: Re: Heavy Felarya Mon Apr 28, 2008 3:37 pm | |
| Yeah I love misleadin titles But anyways, I got the idea of the title from a song from the Metal Slug 5 OST, Heavy African, it played during the Jungle Mission and was pretty damn bad ass. | |
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Raetsu Lord Pichu
Marauder of the deep jungle
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| | Subject: Re: Heavy Felarya Tue Apr 29, 2008 8:53 pm | |
| Dammit, I need to stop double postin'
Oh yeah, Adventure 6 is up, enjoy. | |
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Raetsu Lord Pichu
Marauder of the deep jungle
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| | Subject: Re: Heavy Felarya Sat Oct 25, 2008 8:35 pm | |
| Blah blah blah Update, not that many really care anymore | |
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Karbo
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| | Subject: Re: Heavy Felarya Sun Oct 26, 2008 4:26 pm | |
| Well I do.. I think your story is nice and have some great moments, like this rock paper scissors game between Anna and Crisis XD | |
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Pendragon
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| | Subject: Re: Heavy Felarya Sun Oct 26, 2008 9:31 pm | |
| As do I.
Damn, I should really clear my schedule more so I can enjoy such stories like this. | |
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Raetsu Lord Pichu
Marauder of the deep jungle
Posts : 326
Join date : 2007-12-10
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Location : Netherworld of the Usagiyasha
| | Subject: Re: Heavy Felarya Thu Jan 08, 2009 10:00 pm | |
| Wooowee, it sure has been awhile hasn't it?
Unfortunetly I don't really have the next chapter up yet, frankly I hit writers block, I know what I want to write but I can't form decent words to make a good chapter. This is basically saying that I haven't left this for dead, I still house alot of interest in this story, just that I don't have as much time as I do to update as I usually do anymore.
In anycase, if you feel the need to, discuss on what's happen so far, or what you think I should do to improve on this. I don't mind constructive critisism at all, so long as it's not trollbait or anything. | |
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Karbo
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| | Subject: Re: Heavy Felarya Sun Jan 11, 2009 2:33 pm | |
| Ack.. well I'll be sure looking forward to what will happens next ^_^ | |
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EliteCreature
Seasoned adventurer
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Location : Memphis, TN
| | Subject: wow Thu Nov 05, 2009 11:44 pm | |
| it really sucks that this story wasn't ever finished.....can someone tell me why not? | |
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Raetsu Lord Pichu
Marauder of the deep jungle
Posts : 326
Join date : 2007-12-10
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Location : Netherworld of the Usagiyasha
| | Subject: Re: Heavy Felarya Tue Nov 24, 2009 7:08 pm | |
| - EliteCreature wrote:
- it really sucks that this story wasn't ever finished.....can someone tell me why not?
Because the Raetsu Lord Pichu is a lazy bastard! ...Oh wait. Well, anyway, self inflicted loath aside, I've pretty much been stuck on where to go from here. I mean I KNOW where I want it to end, I'm just stuck on what to do with the next chapter. Don't worry, I'mma gonna bring this back. So no need to worry. | |
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Archmage_Bael
Mara's snack
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Location : Shatterock Caldera
| | Subject: Re: Heavy Felarya Tue Nov 24, 2009 7:37 pm | |
| pichu, your signature is highly distracting. | |
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Karbo
Evil admin
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| | Subject: Re: Heavy Felarya Wed Nov 25, 2009 1:44 am | |
| I would be glad to see your story continue And I agree about your sign XD | |
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Stabs
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| | Subject: Re: Heavy Felarya Thu Nov 26, 2009 7:22 am | |
| Outrageous in a number of ways, vulgar in many others, and at the same time simply hilarious. It's like Scary Movie, only well done. | |
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SuperPieGuy9
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| | Subject: Re: Heavy Felarya Mon Feb 15, 2010 1:48 pm | |
| To think I have to wait four years until I can read chapter seven... *sigh* Well I'll be waiting until then and hopefully new chapters will be added by then. | |
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