The slave girls

This is my first felarya based story so i hope you enjoy reading it.
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The slave girls
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Eve
Miranda
Cherry

They were running as fast as they could,all three of them,there was Eve a blonde girl with a pair of D-cup breasts,Then next was Miranda who had C-cup breasts and pretty silver hair and finnaly there was Cherry who had bright red hair and B-cup breasts.Each girl had things in common such as the fact that all free of them where naked and all had scars upon her back which had been caused by there owners violently abusing all three of them.

Eve gripped Miranda's hand who in turn had hold of cherry's,as the three of them ran they could hear more footsteps and shouting behind them.Eve screamed stopping suddenly the three girls had run right into a dead end,the three girls turned to see soldiers apearing beore them guns held high aiming right at them.Eve backed away and should have hit the wall but did not instead fell back through the wall landing on a patch of grass."Come on" Miranda yells after having seen Eve fall through the wall and grabs cherry pushing her through the wall and soon all three girls had landed face down onto the grass.

Eve gagged spitting out grass as the three confused girls looked around at there sudden surroundings.They had arived in a forest the trees towered high above the three terrified girls,they could feel the grass beneath there bare feet.

"Where are we?" Eve asks looking at cherry expectantly as if she had all the answers.

"I don't know,but i don't think we should be worrying about it right now because WE ARE FREE!" Cherry says jumping up and doing a fist punch in the air happily beaming at the other two girls.

Eve and miranda exchange nervous glances which soon turn to joy as the three girls hug happily.Eve clears her throat and moves off through the dense forest bushes followed by Miranda and Cherry.Cherry looked around nervously hearing screaming in the distance,curiousity got the best of her and she moved off away from the two other girls towards the screaming.

Fire was seen in the distance as cherry aproached a village exept the village was burning and there where women running around throwing water upon the fire,upon loking closer cherry noticed that these women had wings upon there backs.Cherry gasped in a nearby burning house there ws the sound of a child screaming and calling out for help ,cherry without thinking what she was doing ran forwards into the house the exit blocked off by burning wood that had fallen down just as cherry had entered the building.Cherry gagged smoke filling her lungs but she didn't let this stop her,she ran up the stairs kicking down a burning door and getting a few second degree burns in the proccess burst into the room where she had heard the screaming.A child was trapped inside like the others this child had dragonfly wings but that didn't deter cherry nor did the hole in the floor which she lept over reaching the girl just as fire enguled both cherry and the girl.

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"commander the slaves have escaped"

"what how nevermind send the parometre after them where did they go"

"not sure but our sources tell us it is a world know only as felarya"

"....."

That was the conversation ended as high above the felaryan forest a blinding light was seen replaced moments later by four landing craft aproaching the ground at a slow pace.Inside each of the landing craft was a group of twelve soldiers a mixture f male and female all with the same weapons MK II pulse rifles.

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Interesting subject.

Thank you for sharing your story! Good to have you here.

If you don't mind a bit of constructive criticism:

slug_man wrote:

They were running as fast as they could,all three of them,there was Eve a blonde girl with a pair of D-cup breasts,Then next was Miranda who had C-cup breasts and pretty silver hair and finnaly there was Cherry who had bright red hair and B-cup breasts.

Immediate reference to their breast size, particularly as being their only defining physical feature (along with their hair colour) seems a bit... clumsy. And not very subtle, really.

On format: My advice would be to pay more attention to punctuation (including commas and capitalisation). Poor punctuation distracts the reader somewhat from the story.

The third person plural possessive pronoun is "their", not "there". So you should have "their" instead of "there" in "looked around at there sudden surroundings", "wings upon there backs", and so on.

Regarding actual content... How did the ships arrive in Felarya? You can't get there by spaceflight from another world. (See here.) Your story seems to say that the ships arrived just "moments" after the order was given. How did that happen? Or are these ships unrelated to the mysterious "commander"?