The Sueishness of Your Characters

Three ticks already and I didn't get past the name. Marcel's an unusual name in Felarya, but I wouldn't use it if I didn't really like it, and it's a foreign name because it's a french name and the guy's Norwegian. 3 points.
He's very attractive without having to work at it, and he's mortal but looks much younger than he actually is... hmm... is he above average intelligence? I'll tick it just in case. And... he's not in Oslo anymore, so he's been estranged from his country... does his coming count as an abduction? Let's try to be on the safe side here and tick it. He also feels bad about stuff that happened... 13 points already.
He's very accomplished, he's been 26 years on the jungle, that's not too shabby. Felarya makes him fluent in all languages, so... they're more than four... he's traveled extensively, since he's a mercenary, and he's educated when Negav's not known for its educational services, so... well, he's not a monk, priest or scholar either. He's lost fair and square a number of times, though, and because of sheer goddamn luck. He also has a temper the size of Alaska, and it gets him in trouble. Besides, he's got nearly no empathy for other people- not where it counts at least, so I won't tick that. I'm already 16 points there.
One of the best he is at his job, and he can kill stuff with his hands, not to mention the martial arts. They're not normal in Felarya, though. 22 points already.
Now, as for immortality- he's immortal, like everyone in Felarya, and I guess he does count as extremely powerful.

Elsie works hard at being pretty, first. Also, she's the lone survivor of her family, and she's living on the other side of the world from her original location. She's angsty about her past, and will angst about it in the future... not to mention giant predators usually can't read. She loses a lot against dumber people, too- and she's got quirks in common with me. She's also got a temper the kind of which isn't helping her case, not to mention a lack of empathy and being selfish, manipulative and sadistic. She's also good at cooking silly stuff despite being primarily a hunter-farmer... and to say I ever agree with anything she does would be a lie. She's also exceptionally powerful for her race, as in "immortals"- since she's 130 foot tall, lol. She also willfully commits murder- repeatedly, and yes, she's been nursed back to health by a kind, loving, caring person. Now, I was very surprised when someone didn't like it, whether I like it or not, that adds points.