Looking for help, and critique

Full Name: Athial Messer
Other names: Ath
Age: 23
Birthday: 17/3
Race: Human
Sex: Male
Eyes: A very light, somewhat glased over blue
Hair: Light brown, almost shoulder length, messy
Other physical notes: A small cross-like scar on his right cheek, a larger scar running from beside his eye, over his cheek and to the jaw on his left side.
Clothing and apparel: Despite weather, Athial always seems to wear long and somewhat thick clothing. Typically, it's a white button up shirt underneath a jacket, cloak or hood of some kind. More often than not, it's a blue jacket with different white and black highlights all over it. A motif of a snowflake on the back tops it off. More intriguing though, is that the sleeves have zips that run up their length. Why, who knows, but Athial finds it fun to play with when he's got nothing better to do. Long black pants, black boots, and a belt that he afixes a scabbard to.


Physical capacity: He's armed well, if nothing else. Athial keeps a sword on his being at all times - given the name 'frostbite' as a joke more than anything - should he need it. It's a strange blade, most criticize the sword at a first glance. It's quite clearly styled after a cutlass, or maybe even scimitar or katana, but the blade curves away from the wielder. Don't get the wrong idea, though, the slashing edge is still facing his enemies, but the blade itself curves that way, too. Despite this, Athial's quite skilled at using the sword when the moment arises. Outside of weapons and fighting, he's in good shape, having a decent understanding of free running and parkour.

Mental capacity: If Athial had one true strong suit, it would be this. Specializing in using water and ice magic and energy attacks, this is what he truly dedicates himself to. He's at the point with controlling the twin elements that he can condense and compact the water in the air and then flash-freeze it, meaning he can conjure weapons and tools in the blink of an eye. Not only that, but Athial can keep track of different magic and energy signatures, allowing for quick - albeit consuming - teleports. In fact, he's elementally infused his sword so that he could keep tabs on it, meaning that he can warp to the blade instantly, or vice versa.

Spiritual capacity: There's a sense of morale or honour about Athial, and he holds a set of personal beliefs above his own safety. Taking status and occupation into account, Athial soon learnt a deeper meaning behind the sort of motto of his 'brotherhood' of fellow mages and warriors: "At a moments notice, when the moment comes." Keeping this phrase on his mind at all times, Athial never draws his sword upon someone without reason or orders driving it. Even in such a dangerous place as Felarya, he practically refuses to use the weapon upon another person... No matter their size, clearly.


Physical strengths and weaknesses: Well trained in swordplay, and he knows how to get around. However, that's really where most of his raw physical strengths end... He's a human, after all, no god. Hit him in a vital spot and he's downed, and moreso in regards to Felarya: just eat him.

Mental strengths and weaknesses: Once again, this really is the one area where Athial shines, but, of course, nobody's perfect. Despite having an incredible understanding of ice and water magic, he has little to no control over other elements. He's also extremely succeptible to fire and wind based magic, should that ever need to be known.

Spiritual strengths and weaknesses: One of his greatest spiritual strengths could also be considered a weakness, the words he live by. This trait had the potential to either save or ruin his chances of survival at least once in his travels, and many more times to come.


Likes, dislikes: He loves being able to help people, but, this pretty much goes out the window on Felarya, where it truly is every man for himself. That being said, Athial really despises greed. He also really loves sparring and practicing in general, both with his magic and his sword - meaning he needs to swing around a sheathed blade if he's practicing swordplay.

Personality: He's quite calm and collected, and slow to anger. When he needs to be serious, though, it shows. Regal, and presentable, almost noble, Athial is high class to say the least. Despite this, though, he's never been the sort to look down upon someone, never judgmental - he believes an opinion should be formed around knowledge alone. Relatively quiet, he really doesn't say a whole lot, especially when 'surrounded' by many people. Athial much prefers to have a one-to-one conversation. On the outside, and at a first glance, he comes off as stoic, aloof, and frankly.... Uncaring, seemingly willing to protect only certain others. When, really, he's opposite - someone who would put the rights and safety of another before his own, whenever possible. To describe him in one word: Chivalrous.

Story: In his world, the concepts of magic and science go hand in hand. The both of them exist together. Athial's life is a good one, and there's more to come. An only child, Athial spent the earlier years of his life attending school and spending time with friends - nothing out of the ordinary. Upon turning 19, he took a liking to the concept of magic, intending on furthering his already basic knowledge. With high hopes, Athial sat an exam to become a member of a 'brotherhood' within his immediate area, and passed. Dedicating the next few years of his life to learning water and ice magic, that took him to the level he's at now. His unique style with the two elements makes him a force to be reckoned with in combat, but he felt something was missing. He had a sword forged for him, a very cutlass-esque weapon with his own little twists and traits put into the design. That's really all there is at the current moment in time, but there's one chapter of his life that's being written at this moment.

Felarya. Athial researched the concept of a 'dimensional crossroad' for several months, finally piecing bits of infomation together, making sense of many notes. He himself offered to do some further research into the subject, and willingly prepared himself for what was to come. Upon reaching the jungle, though, he felt he wasn't prepared at all. He didn't know this at the time, but he arrived in the general area of the Chordoni Waterfalls... This is where his story begins, people. Let's hope it doesn't end here, too.