Chaos on Felarya

Better late than never ^^

Here are the first 4 Parts of my new Felarya story "Chaos on Felarya", which includes many characters from other artists like Karbo, Zoekin, kikijonson, moonlight, reiko doggy and my own ^^ . I hope everybody who didn't read it until now will like it There is a lot of fun, action, a little vore and also a evil enemy


Please give me your criticism for the story, it would be very, very important to me



Part I

http://ravana3k.deviantart.com/art/Chaos-on-Felarya-I-80524392


Part II

http://ravana3k.deviantart.com/art/Chaos-on-Felarya-II-80641925

Part III

http://ravana3k.deviantart.com/art/Chaos-on-Felarya-III-80815261

Part IV

http://ravana3k.deviantart.com/art/Chaos-on-felarya-IV-81062760



Part V will be published soon, think within the next 2-3 days, I needed a little inspiration-break and now I've much motivation to continue. Oh and because the story seems to be popular (over 200 views, which is rarely for my stories), I've decided to continue the concept of using different characters from other artists from time to time, so next time I'll use some new characters and also from other artists I think

Well have fun so far!

Part V has finally ben finished

http://ravana3k.deviantart.com/art/Chaos-on-Felarya-V-81929021

Well I'm hooked!
Your characters are well-thought out and your villian is really very threatening!
I'm getting a little worried as to how our friends in Felarya will survive this!

And here's the answer to this question xD


Part VI

http://ravana3k.deviantart.com/art/Chaos-on-Felarya-VI-82345414

Last Chapter has been finished:

http://ravana3k.deviantart.com/art/Chaos-on-Felarya-VII-82462589


Closing I wanted to ask for your opinion at the whole story. Did you like it? What was bad? What was good? was there something good? What could I do better the next time ... etc ?

I'm still learning, especially writting such long stories and every criticism is important for me