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PostSubject: Petal's story   Petal's story Icon_minitimeSun Nov 29, 2009 12:37 pm

Petal grinned looking down upon the three morsels before her, she held all three of them in the air a vine wrapped around each of there waists. The three before her were clearly all female, Petal smiled at them licking her lips as though to taunt the three of them, then to taunt them further Petal used her tongue to slowly lick the girls across there faces.

All but one of the girls was struggling though why Petal had no idea, with a single finger she removed the dress from one of the girls revealing a petite asian Neko. Removing another dress revealed a second slightly plump neko. But Petal didn't need to remove the dress of the third girl as she wasn't wearing one, she was clearly human.

Petal licked her lips examining each girl over "mmm the Petal wonders which morsel to eat first" She says a soft, hungry smile upon her face. "The petal is thinking............you" she says gripping the asian neko between a finger and thumb. Raising the girl up Petal placed the neko halfway between her green lips everything from her butt down was sticking out of Petal's mouth.

Petal's mouth muffled the neko's screams, but the other two could clearly see her legs kicking wildly, Petal used her tongue to get behind the Neko so that her feet rested upon petal's tongue before she dragged the asian neko into her mouth holding her there.

"The petal thinks this be a tasty sweet" Petal says in a muffled voice as she moved the neko around in her mouth before tilting her head back tauntingly slo, so that the two remaining girls could watch as Petal swallowed sending there friend to her waiting stomach.

Petal smiled "mmm the petal wants seconds" she says stuffing the second neko into her mouth tasting her with her tongue, a disgusted expression came out onto Petal's face before she spat out the neko onto the floor "Petal dealt with the bad food calmly"

"ew Petal's food soilled itself...BAD FOOD!" Petal yells raising her fist and bringing it down upon the now fleeing neko, when she raised her fist the neko was gone, but there was a lot of blood upon the grass.

"At least the petal has dessert girl left" Petal says turning her head to the third and final girl held by her vines Petal smiled popping the human into her mouth and without taking the time to savour the meal like Petal knew she should have, she swallowed sending the human to join the asian neko in her stomach.

Petal let out a cute little belch before she patted her stomach content with the meal inside, Petal giggled softly to herself as she laid down in the clearing examining the campsite the girls had, as she closed her eyes she didn't notice the small figure walking towards her, before she fell into a soft sleep her chest rising and lowering rythmicly to the sound of her breathing.

The plant girl did not know how long she had been asleep but when she awoke she felt that her meal had been emptied and her stomach was empty. Speaking of her stomach as Petal raised her head she noticed a figure resting upon her stomach, she blinked curiously and watched through hungry eyes as the figure got up, Petal was shocked to see a little neko girl that looked no older than eight.

Petal smiled the Neko girl looked cute and tasty, she had bright orange hair with a pair of goggles resting on the fringe and she wore a white top and a jacked, and blue jeans. Petal also noticed the girl was wearing red and white trainers. As the girls head turned to face her Petal smiled and so did the neko girl, grinning as if she had done the most normal thing in the world.

Petal moved her hand to grab the girl but was surprised when the girl hugged her thumb gently, Petal blinked a little confused.

"The petal is wondering what is the child doing/?" she speaks in a soft, calm voice almost lovingly.

The girl turned her head to look at Petal and uttered a simple phrase that petal could easily understand and one that brought a smile to her face.

"Hug"

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There is my first real atempt at a story I hope you enjoy it.
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PostSubject: Re: Petal's story   Petal's story Icon_minitimeSun Nov 29, 2009 4:48 pm

its an interesting story. it was all pretty cute except for the "crush" part.
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PostSubject: Re: Petal's story   Petal's story Icon_minitimeSun Nov 29, 2009 4:59 pm

Ew petal's food soiled itself... BAD FOOD!! Way to take a new spin on the bad food concept!
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PostSubject: Re: Petal's story   Petal's story Icon_minitimeWed Dec 09, 2009 11:50 am

You might want to use longer paragraphs, and break them into sentences... just my two cents.
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