Yay! My first Felaryan story!

http://neko-pet.deviantart.com/art/Trixy-and-Crisis-143350746

I just made my first Felaryan story featuring Crisis, Anna (not much of her, but will be a more in the next story) My naga, Trixy, and all those random little prey that end up in the bellies of your favorit preditors.

Please read my story and comment and tell me how you like it and what I need to work on. Thanks!

there is the story section of the forum for this kind of thing ^^;

Moved to the Story forum.

Oh, sorry, thanks for that. heheh.

Nice story! I love how Trixy counted out how many humans were there. I was LMAO-ing at that. And even how she had to count things out to know how old she was. Only two words can accurately describe your story. Comedy gold.

lol, thanks! Glad you liked it. ^^

i can definently find enough addiction to read it. however currently im about half way through and I have to say Anna doesn't "catch prey" all that often. so far thats all I have to say about it.

thanks, and I don't think I had her "catching prey" at all...just yelling at Crisis for breaking a contraption she was working on.

well at one point it says she slithered off to catch prey.


but that's like one of my main errors in my "beta" story (meeting of fate part 1) where mara shrinks a naga. I dont know why its there and it doesn't pertain to the plot, but for some reason i typed it.

oh, I think that must be referring to Crisis...I'll have to look at that and edit it to make more sense. Thanks. ^^

sure, no problem

just got done looking and it says clearly that Crisis is the one hunting prey. Did you skip a few words? I do that all the time when reading lol