My first new character: Balthus Darkstorm

Well, after a little urging from Karbo to put it up and get some feedback, I present to you Balthus, the Void Dragon.

Now, I read the rules, and this one is potentially a UPC, So I took the liberty of rewiring a Felaryan Origin story, and worked some of my magic, I created some inherrent weaknesses into the character to flesh him out more (As well as make him slightly more appealing as a prey as much as a predator)

So, here I go...

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Name: Lucien (Is actually Balthus Darkstorm this is an assumed identity whilist he is trapped in human form)
Race: Void Dragon *Unique* (Trapped in the form of a human)
Age: Unknown - Immortal, has been living since before Felarya was a planet


Apperance: (Currently) - Lucien is a rather large human, over 7 feet tall, well muscular and pale... with jet black straight hair and crimson eyes. He is slightly hairy all over... and has a medium length beard and moustache. He wears Full plate armour, jet black with red trimms and golden outlines. This armour is made from his own powers and magical abilities, thus making them incredibly powerful and durable.
(Pre Void Assimilation) - Pure jet plack skin of scales with red underbelly, crimson eyes, Black horns and claws, white teeth. A crown of horns adorns his skull, a configuration of 3 horns, 2 jutte our from the sides and face forwards , and one from the middle of the forehead jutting out and curving upwards at the tip. His height 123 feet vertically, 140 feet from snout to tail. Has nearly 300 foot wingspan. and he weighs approximately 8000 tonnes
(Post Void Assimilation) - Not too disimilar from the pre Void assimilation, exept that now he is vastly larger (Over 5 miles in height, and proportions and weight also increase to meet it.) Due to the mutations of the Void Energy however, his body is now adorned by far more spikes and sharp spines all over his body, strategically located to be made into effective weapons and armour.


Personality: Cold, calculating and utterly ruthless and relentless. he has a single minded determination that was once focused on his 3 main goals, the recovery of his soul and body... the death and destruction of the traitors, and finally, the end to the humanoids that had him walk down the dark path by destroying his mate and children... However, that was before the Void came for him...When his body merged with the fundamental force of destruction, Balthus's own raw hatred and rage where exponentially increased, along with his already near unstoppable might. The only thing he cared about at that point, was the utter anihilation of everything around him... reguardless of their attachment to his previous life, everything and everyone was now a target to feed his insatiable hunger, becoming the very living embodiment of the fundamental force he has just assimilated. This was a machination of the Void itself however, altering Balthus's memories making him beleive that nobody was innocent, nobody was exempt from his revenge for the deaths of his family, and stoking the rage and hatred within his heart, blackening it beyond all hope of redemption. and his true road down the path of destruction. Before his journey down the path of vengence, he was considered to be quite lighthearted and humorous, although he was particularly powerful and physically strong for even the Dragonkin, he was more of a gentle giant... Now... Nothing remains exept the purist hatred and vengence. He detests his current form, which makes him burn even more... Beneath it all though, Balthus actually feels deep regret and sorrow, unable to mourn or let go of his family, his rage is merely an outward manifestation of the rage he feels at himself for not being able to save them, for all of the power he had back then, he could not protect or save the ones he cherished above all others, and for that reason, he also cannot forgive himself...

Skills, Strengths and Abilities: As a dragon, Balthus was considered to be near godlike, his power was insurmountable and unequaled on the planet, capable of abilities that completely boggled the mind, be it magical, physical or powers... At a very young age, he had earned the single highest gift of his race, the power of immortality, such as is a gift from the ancient gods upon his people should they work hard to obtain strength and power beyond the limits of their mortal bodies... Arius was extremely gifted and talented in the arts of combat and warfare, but back then, he considered the very act of war and killing to be wasteful and pointless, all he ever wanted was to test his limits, and exceed them.

Then, when Balthus began to walk the path of vengance and hatred, he had lost all his restraint and remorse towards the act of killing, and his murderous rage made his powers all the moree potent and destructive, as the years progressed, he continued to gain experience and trained himself in the killing arts, including the martial skills, the use of his power to kill and even the dark magics.

Finally, after the second betrayal, and the loss of his will to fight, the Void found him, and merged itself with his very being, the most negative fundamental force transformed him into the Void Dragon, the very living incarnation of destruction. his aura became so corrupted it became poisonous to all life, existance and reality... His powers became unfathomable by even guardian standards. and as his first act using this power, he completely destroyed his own home planet, along with everything on it, and fed it into the endlesssly hungry power of the Void. The world no longer existed... and the monster turned towards the universe at large, and beyond... all existance was layed before him, and he began a systematic slaughter of all of it, beginning with his own universe. His powers grew the more he destroyed and consumed. He had become the single most forefront threat to all creation, and even the Gods could not stop him now, they had to utilise the only thing that could counter the Voids energy, it's opposite, Genesis, the force of all creation, the fundamental energy that enables everything to exist. By using this power at the right time, they managed to trap the maniacle monster.

Now, as a human, Balthus's (Lucien's) power has been greatly shattered, no longer is he able to become his true self, but with his soul and body gone, over 98% of his total power is lost to him, but, even in such a weakened state, he is still one of the most powerful beings on the planet... Continually training, testing himself, and exceeding his limits, but now, his will posesses a sinister edge, a will to kill without hesitation or regrets... Lucien is still very much a capable fighter and is able to summon vast magical abilities as well as battle powers that are nearly undefeatable... The Void is still with him, making him all the more dangerous, yet he cannot suse it like he once did, his current form is far too weak to use it in it's full power... the Void spurrs him of to reclaim his body and soul...

He posesses the ability to generate and control vast quantities of varous energies, including elemental, magic, and ki energies. Balthus is also exeptionally strong and fast, the years of martial training and experience have seen to this. his endurance, durability and stamina are also vastly superior to most other creatures of similar size and weight, his world was a high gravity and dense planet, thus his body density is several times that of ordinary creatures from other worlds.

With the Void, attacking Balthus is incredibly difficult, the Void renders him almost completely immune to magic, magical energy breaks down when it reaches his aura and shatters in close proximity, even the most complex and powerful spells lose their potence near him. Of course, spells fuelled by Void Energy gain a considerable boost in their destructive potency.

With the void though, magical powers never seem to work on him, the spells energy is perverted and destroyed by the Voids miasmatic aura. However, Magics that are fuelled by the Void gain a tremendous increase in their destructive potency.

(2nd post, dagnabit!)

Story: In the Beginning: Balthus led the life of a carefree youngster, although he subjected himself to harsh and physically exhaustive training in order to exeed his limits and improve himself, he was always light-hearted, good natured and naive enough to beleive anything was possible, nothing was beyond his reach. as he grew older and wiser, he was by far the strongest of all Dragon-Kin short of the Immortals and Ancient Dragons. He eventually found a mate and began a family... Life was good, food was plentiful, and relations with other races where peaceful and prosperous...

But, not all was what it seemed.... For one day, when the hunters and warriors of the small tribe Balthus belonged to journeyed out for food, a group of Dragon Slayers attacked the clans homeland. With much of the clans fighting strength away during the hunt, the females and children, along with the few males that stayed behind where slaughtered. while galantly fought, killing many of the Slayer party, the humans numbers proved far too overwhelming. When the hunting party returned, all they found of their families and the clan has been destroyed. Balthus, holding the dead and brutalised bodies of his children in the palm of his right claw, and clutching his mates body to his chest with his left, let out a horrible scream of despair and sorrow. for many hours, he cradled his dead family, crying uncontrollably.

Slowly, his heart became hard and dark... first in a quagmire of pain, the pain of sorrow and despair... then of an infinite rage, hatred and need for vengence... Thus was born the greatest threat the planet would ever see...

The Endless Search for Vengence: Once he had completed the last rights and held a funeral pyre for those that lost their lives, Balthus and the remaining survivors thursted for vengence, immediately began assaulting all nearby human dwellings, their thirst for human blood, and hunger for human flesh where unbound and relentless... in the first week they had cleared many thousands of humans from the surrounding territories. the people, in fear, fleed the rampaging monsterous assault, but could not escape for long as the Dragon's endless pursuit eventually cunsumed them as well.

After some time, Balthus had completed his revenge against the ones that had killed his clan and family, but in that time, his hatred had spread to encompass all humanity, and his endless rage would not allow his revenge to cease with the ones who committed the terrible atrocity. To him, as long as humans exist, the threat will always be there, to consume more lives in some selfish pursuit of glory, or false indignation. His clanmates where growing weary and wished for an end to the ceaseless fighting. In his rage, Balthus condemned the remnants of his own clan as cowards and traitors, slaying as many as he could get his claws on, while the rest fled, finding haven within other clans, forever ending Balthus's clan to the shades of history...

Balthus continued his quest alone, the ceaseless destruction he caused drew to him all maner of evil beins to his cause... led by the unstoppable might of the immortal Chaos Dragon, he founded an empire of brutal aggression, dedicated to the end of Humans and those that supported them. It was during this time that Scion, a particularly brilliant Dark Elf of great strength and power in his own right. On top of that, he was a strategic and tactical genius, as well as a first class sorcerer. With Scion commanding the growing military might of Balthus's empire, total victory for Balthus was within his reach... Until...

The Betrayal: In a single act of subtle espionage, Scion betrayed Arius to the kingdom of Kryon, the most powerful and stalwart opponent of the Dragon's quest. Scion had defected in secret, and delivered Arius to the Kingdom's Elder mages council, where the 12 most powerful wizards in the world finally captured the Dragon using their formidable sorcery, and the King of Kryon, Sargeras, ordered the Dragons execution.

Balthus's immortality proved to be far too much of a barrier to the kings request however, and so devised a most powerful curse with which to strip the dragon of all his power.

The multi faceted curse first was to create an inherent vulnerability within his body, and at the same time, preventing the Dragon from breeding to perpetuate his hatred.

To accomplish this, the curse prevents him from even touching a female of any compatible species, doing so would drain him of his strength and powers, transferring them to his potential mate. at the same time rendering him paralised and weakened to the point of near death, but still concious... thus able to feel fear.

The next step separated the Immortal Dragon's soul from his body, thereby cutting him off from the greatest portion of his power. The soul was then stored away in the Elder's magically sealed vault, thereby preventing Balthus from reclaiming it.

But, at that moment, Before they could separate the Dragon's Soul, Scion had launched his insurrection against the Kingdom of Kryon, having already claimed Balthus's former position of command, his feigned alleigance spelled doom for Kryon, and with the Elders murdered, Balthus was able to escape Scion's grasp of power, within a day, Sargeras had been deposed and executed, and Kryon became annexed by Scion's Empire...

Path to Power: After escaping from Imperial Territory, Balthus became empty, a second betrayal had destroyed his faith in his own cause, and thus in his only reason for living, but his gift of immortality became his trap, he could not end what he calls a pointless existance. His emptiness grew to consume him just as the rage did before...

This depression and utter lack of anything whatsoever eventually drew to him the malignant force of the Void. It sensed a kindred relationship with this being, who had fallen so deeply that not even Hell would have accepted him, the perfect candidate to become it's physical incarnation. The void forced itself into his body, mind and spirit, and perverted them into a force of anihilation.

The days of Darkness: With the assimilation completed, the newly born Void Dragon, Balthus was once more filled with the killing rage, exept this time, nothing was exempt from his onslaught. Now there was no longer a difference. in his first act, the Dragon unleashed an attack that immediately destroyed the entire planet... all life, all civilisations, his initial vengence was finally, decisively, completed, but now, a new purpose filled his soul, the utter anihilation of all existance...

What he now cosidered to be the injustice of life had to be ended permanently. With the strength of the wizards curse gone, Balthus was free to destroy anything he wished, at any time, and he plunged several universes into the depths of terrror and destruction. The gods proved powerless to even slow the monster down, the fundamental energies of the Void where beyond even them. Helpless as one dimension after another fell to the best, they needed to formulate a plan to stop the enraged monster before he would undo the very fabric of many realities, causing existance to systematically collapse into itself.

The Trap: The Gods correctly surmised that the only thing that could stop the Void Energy within the creature would be to utilise Voids only true opposite of equal stength, and that was Genesis energy, the very fundamental force of all creation. A Genesis egg was formed, and the Gods quietly awaited their chance to strike. When the chance came, they struck out en masse, their own powers, and the use of the egg ensnared the beast in an inescapable trap, the genesis was workig, able to block even the most destructive attacks the Void empowered beast used to try and free itself.

Once secured in the trap, the Gods ran into the same problems as the Sorcerers on his homeland once did, the power of immortality prevented them from being able to destroy him, they had to devise a way of separating his power from the maniacle mind behind it. And so, it was decided that he should be separated from his body and his soul. The soul was torn from the creature, causing it to howl in pain, and it was encased into a n orb, glowing brightly of a transculent green, and eminating dark clouds of void energy all around it.

Next was the separation of the mind from the body, feeling his will and conscious thought being stripped, the dragon thrashed against it's cage like a wild beast, eventually being severed completely, the body became inert, though still inherently powerful. Each peice proved to be just as indestructible as the individual whole, and the Gods decided to make use of Balthus's power another way. First the body was planted into a dead world, buried deep into it's inner core, and using the power of transmuatation, the planet was commanded to siphon off the bodies residual energies to create life and environment, then, the soul was placed on the surface of the plant, within a large mountain. (This would eventually become the Mysterious Temple in a few hundred million years time) Then it was time to deal with the creatures mind, central peice of the problem. To prevent the creature from regaining it's power, soul and body, the new planet was transported to the nexus, a place that exists bitween dimensions... it's randomness throughout the pathways of existance hopefully prevent Balthus from finding it. Then, they formed Balthus mind a new body, the shape, size and dimensions of a human male, an ironic and cruel gesture of his new fate. and cast him back into one of the many infinite mortal planes to exist forever trapped in the body of his most hated of foes.

Finding a Way: Balthus, now trapped in a body he loathed, and with almost all his power lost, began a journey of training and reclamation of his power. all of his experience helped him, and his incredible will drove him, but he had to relearn how to fight, and relearn the use of what was left of his powers, then build back upon them. A small portion of the Void was still with him, and it's potency and strength aided him greatly. Fortunately, the planet they where on was one of war, the strongest survive, and the weak perish, which suited him well. His immortality granted him freedom to do as he pleased, and he learned the combat arts of humanoids relatively quickly, mastering many abilities and gaining much power. However, even now he detested them, loathed humans with irrevokable vengence, but now he was forced to tolerate some of them for the time being. Even mastering human sorcery and magics proved to be only a small stepping stone on his quest, he needed some of their magic to begin traversing dimensional boundries, but after many hundreds of millions of years, and countless journeys to other worlds, and other dimensions, greatly broadening his powers, he was finally ready to make a play for his true powers back. He knew that no matter how long he trained, fought, destroyed and ved the more infantile Void energy he currently had, he would only be a miniscule fraction of his true power, to complete his vengence he needed his full might back once more. He knew the planet would be well defended if he ever found it, but he also knew that now he was more than a match for any opponent, he had waited for far too long.

He smiled, the curse of the ancient sorcerers had been warped by the void, it's effectiveness was lessened and changed... His powers where ready, and he activated the dimensional warp around him... he was comming for his body and soul, and nobody would be able to stop him this time...

Other notes: Although powerful Balthus does have a few considerable weaknesses I've put in and carefully constructed a story about, first is Balthus's is very single minded, his entire being is completely focused on his own immediate objectives. Second; is the very debilitating curse... As described above, even though Balthus is effectively immortal, and he can regenerate even the greatest blatantly fatal wounds with disturbing quickness and ease, the curse in it's original form severely debilitates him... even the lightest physical contact with the fairer sex can cause a massive loss of power (To the extraordinary gain of the lady who touched him, mind you), prolonged physical contact will render him completely helpless, all the while, the one in contact will him will gain a massive upsurge of extreme power... Balthus usually blasts females from a distance in order to avoid the debilitating effects of the curse... However, the Void Energy has erased the curses effectiveness when he was in his prime, and mutated the curse in his human state, the curse now only works with a concerted effort on the part of the woman to maintain a hold on him, after a few minutes of contact, only then would the curse begin to take effect, it is also much more slow acting, needing the hold to be maintained for over 30 minutes before causing Balthus to become too weak to fight back. Of course, most predators would not be able to eat him due to the Void energy crating a decaying, poisonous and miasmatic aura around him, only those with a strong enough will could fight off the effects of the Void enough to enjoy eating him. And if successful...

As mentioned, Balthus is an immortal, he cannot truly be killed... Even the curse could not kill him fully, and, although he feels the pain of injury like anyone else does, his body will always reform to it's original state (Trapped as a human still, of course). even if a large female where to swallow him (Either bite by bite, or whole and intact) he would feel the stomach acid burn, but it would be the continual physical contact doing the real damage... but even then, after the digestion proccess is finished, he would still reform afer a few weeks to a few months. if the female succeeds in eating Balthus, then she would be treated to many months of greately heightened powers, putting her on par or even beyond the powers of most guardians, but only if she maintains the strength of will to prevent her mind being poisoned by the Void, if she fails this, then she would become a mindless murderous beast of destruction powered by the Void.

Another thing to mention is, the duration of contact will determine how long the female in question remains in contact with Balthus, prolonged contact like that described above will grant the female several months worth of power, and the effect is cumulative, repeated prolonged contact will make the effect last longer each time it is done, and Balthus's recovery periods also take longer...

Another peculiar effect of the curse, is that prolonged exposure may shrink Balthus's body, long time repeated exposure can shrink him down to a mere 4 inches in overall height... Although if he can escape, or is excreted and forgotten, he will return to his normal human size...

Overall though, Besides the curse, and his now natural adversion to Genesis energy, Balthus only weakness seems to be his emotions, he also feels a deep sense of lonliness... the terror caused by the Void energy, and it's poisonous nature prevent him from getting close to any form of life, let alone anyone else. This, combined with a deep seeded sense of guilt and sorrow manifests as rage at the outside world... the gates to his heart have been closed so tightly for so long, that any form of good emotion has become so alien to him, he couldn't understand...

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So, what do you all think? Suggestions? Constructive Criticism? Or just toss it out the window...

My grammar is probably horrid, I know, Sorry about that...

If Balthus is intended to be a Guardian, he's set.

If not, he's a bit too old and overpowered. A universal threat that is several million years old? With the only weakness being females needing to hold him for half an hour and that he's single-minded?

Right now he has no Weakness that is worth mentioning, while his power is enough that even limited in his human form he should be able to go "I hate this pred, *Boom* And this city, *Boom* And I don't quite like this Jungle's attitude, *Sets it ablaze*."

As said above: If intended to be a Guardian / God, he's set. If not, you have some serious power culling in order.

Well, yes he was intended to be an opponent for the Guardians, a sort of common threat that they could set aside their differences and fight together against.

However, there is a reason why he wouldn't start blowing away things at random, namely his search for his real body and soul. he wouldn't risk destroying them by blowing away massive areas with single attacks, the more of Felarya that survives when he fully resurrects, the more powerful he would be, so I'd surmise then that he would only destroy immediate direct threats, rather than massive AOE attacks.

EDIT: Oh, and the curse works within 180 seconds, though it's not completely debilitating until the 30 min yime elapses, all that means is he can struggle for some time, but as he weakens, she strengthens, making the thances of escape drastically alter the longer she can maintain a grip. Heh, works for me, at least that way normal mortal creatures have to fight a little before gaining power, rather than gaining it by only brushing against him as before...

Thanks for the feedback though, it does help.

Darkstorm Zero wrote:

Well, yes he was intended to be an opponent for the Guardians, a sort of common threat that they could set aside their differences and fight together against.

However, there is a reason why he wouldn't start blowing away things at random, namely his search for his real body and soul. he wouldn't risk destroying them by blowing away massive areas with single attacks, the more of Felarya that survives when he fully resurrects, the more powerful he would be, so I'd surmise then that he would only destroy immediate direct threats, rather than massive AOE attacks.

Thanks for the feedback though, it does help

A haxxored, extremely old entity that's on Guardian level?

A common threat for the Guardians to work together against?

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No.

Just... No.

/Fish/ wrote:

A haxxored, extremely old entity that's on Guardian level?

A common threat for the Guardians to work together against?

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No.

Just... No.

yeah, i agree with fish.

by the way who are you?

Wait... I got nothing constructive out of those comments at all...

No sugestions, no ways to improve the character... nothing at all...

@Reptilian: Who me? Heh, I'm an old friend, I'm the one who came up with Mennysan's nickname over 3 years ago: "Welcome to the Second Gate of Hell!" back on DA.

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I do suppose I need to flesh him out more though, I'm going to start writing a story reguarding him, and then I'm going to try out another idea with stories, where different people can have a go at writing each chapter, we can see some people's imput working in different ways then.

EDIT: And actually, now that I think of it, I beleive I've come up with a good compromise, this character, Balthus, woukd only exist for a limited time in this state, long enough to write a story on, then at the end of the final chapter(s), I can again alter him into a character more normalised and far less dangerous.

I'd have to pass the idea through Karbo to get it to work, but I think that the ending would shock some, given how evil and dark Balthus seems to some at the moment.

2nd EDIT: I may also try my hand at a very first art peice depicting a pre battle scene with Nemyra. the rough sketch works fairly well so far.

I think people are trying to say that this character just doesnt feel like someone who would live in Felarya. At least, thats what I think.

You're trying to do too much, I think. Epic battles against the guardians...all the guardians fighting a common foe...that kind of stuff. The fact is, the guardians are kept vague by Karbo on purpose. they arent supposed to wage an open war. He wants them kept as a mysterious, unknown force that works behind the scenes.

Any kind of open war...would probably destroy massive portions of Felarya, or alter it forever. Look at Notys. she alters reality itself just by moving around. Can you imagine what could happen if she tried to fight something? up would become down, black would become white...puppies and kittens would start making babies and Crisis would become a vegetarian. it would be total chaos...or reality would unwind. Who knows.

Also...I just dont see all of Felarya coming into existance because of your character. It seems kind of arrogant to include that in his bio too. Im just saying, i think you're trying to do too much with this character...and I wouldnt try to bring the guardians into the spotlight. Karbo has gone to lengths to keep them mysterious and behind the scenes.

Don't worry, any damage that can be done during the course of the story can be undone by its conclusion. At least thats the intended outcome.

Also, it wasn't just himself, only his power being used to make the process work. The voids warping power would have made life outside any normal reality possible, and it's ever hungry and consuming nature would have passed on to the life forms that grew from it. Seemed to make sense...

Darkstorm Zero wrote:

Don't worry, any damage that can be done during the course of the story can be undone by its conclusion. At least thats the intended outcome.

Also, it wasn't just himself, only his power being used to make the process work. The voids warping power would have made life outside any normal reality possible, and it's ever hungry and consuming nature would have passed on to the life forms that grew from it. Seemed to make sense...

Please tell me you arent thinking of using the "Dragonball Z, we'll magically fix it all later" excuse? Look, just because you CAN fix it, doesnt mean you have free roam to wage a war that will tear Felarya to bits. Its pointless.

Im not talking about whether it makes sense or not. Its still fairly arrogant to make a character that is directly responsible for Felarya and everything on it. Karbo hasnt even given an official origin story, and he might never if he wants to keep it a mystery, but he's the only one that should give one. ts HIS world. We all just try to find our own little spot in it...not take over, destroy and fix it at will.

No no, nothing like that... Thats a pretty big leap of assumption there.

As to wether or not he likes the idea, well thats up to him, but I'm pretty sure that I'm allowed to raise an idea as long as it's vacant am I not? For you to simply blast the idea with out providing anything constructive is also arrogant... but I'm not here to debate, and the character can be altered, I'm not afraid to work on it, but so far, nobody's actually suggesting anything positive.

EDIT: Well, after a round in the chat with some members, it seems I've got some reworking ahead of me before I start writing the story or tackle the art, Ah well, projects do improve with input from others they say.

Err I am sorry but I have to agree with everyone here ^^;

As I see it, creating a character able to equal / overwhelm guardians is not a very good idea in the first place.. Guardians are not very developped because they are not supposed to be seen as real characters..
They are more of an unseen force, and the very reason why Felarya has not been conquered yet, despite countess attempt by countless adventurers / mages / entities who tried it...

I am sorry to say that because you obviously put lof of work in designing this bio...

Lol, that's cool, I just need to rework it and tone it down somewhat, especially with the human form, yeah.

The more I look at it, the actual Dragon form is not too bad, but the human form is way overpowered for its intended purpose.

EDIT: Looks like I'll have to wait a little to do the edits, my computer decided to blow its power supply. need a new one...

he needs a mental weakness that can be exploited also cut his power clean in half the ferlarya guardians are suppose to be unbeatable even against a more powerful force however I never like the idea of someone being unbeatable

Ummm... a good way to de-powerize him...

maybe the very guardians cursed him during his early years? (I bet some guardians could hold the power of future sight, and spotted the almighty [and risky] potential of Balthus.)
With this excuse, you can augment both his rage against them, and lower his absurd amount of power to the limiting wall set by the guardians at every level you may want.

Simple.
And Clean.

I may or may not be able to help with the whole "Guardians aren't interact with anything" part...
My own Character is also pretty fracking overpowered (Probably not Bathumis level mind you; his "Unbridled Spirit" technique could only annihilate a little more then 1 Universe at max... Plus, he can be "Erased".), and his only stated reason for sticking around Felarya after his powers get "Switched On" is to "Have a chat with whatever is making everything in this realm want to snack on sentience."
Since talking with the Guardians is a no-no, I'd be out of luck.
But if it was this Void Dragon's body being at the core of the planet that's causing everything to try and eat everybody, then that's something I could work with.
Here is how I see it:
My Character gets sucked into Felarya with his powers "Switched Off", meaning he's just a normal person someone who has a paradoxical mix of Delusions of Grandeur and the common sense to know they aren't going to happen.
He then has a run-in with a Naga that justifies her soon to occur consumption of him with a "Because I'm bigger and because I can!"
Of course before any eating happens, his powers get "Switched On" and he sets of to try and "Chat" with the Guardians WITHOUT creating a cataclysm first.
This leads to a wild goose chase with his new Travel-sized Naga slave prisoner Tour Guide in tow.
Sometime before or after my Characters arrival, Bathumis shows up and starts doing whatever Dark is going to have him do.
After many trials and tribulations, Bathumis completes his goal and my guy is pressed into stopping him.
A speech and a short fight later, Bathumis is freed and the "Void" is... dealt with... in a most familiar way.
My Character, however, was "Erased".
Due to the fight occurring in a sealed dimension, few know of the magnitude of the disaster that was averted.
One is a recently made Human-sized Naga...

Whiteagle wrote:

My own Character is also pretty fracking overpowered (Probably not Bathumis level mind you; his "Unbridled Spirit" technique could only annihilate a little more then 1 Universe at max...

Hgrk!

Malahite wrote:

Whiteagle wrote:

My own Character is also pretty fracking overpowered (Probably not Bathumis level mind you; his "Unbridled Spirit" technique could only annihilate a little more then 1 Universe at max...

Hgrk!

Hey, its' not like he wants to undo a part of Creation, its' just what happens if that technique gets out of control...
He wouldn't be able to survive if that happened anyways, hence his avoiding using it altogether.

Hmm, I'll have a go at rewriting this, I think I've figured out a way to work it. NKS has given me a few ideas that may work