Characters and other stuff for my story

First of all, I'm not really sure if I'll ever get around to actually writing a story. I'm better at individual concepts (people, places etc.) than creating a cohesive storyline. But maybe I'll give it a shot. For now, I'll throw out my current ideas to see what people think. Also, let me apologize beforehand, as I tend to get carried away when I write this stuff, so it may wind up waaaaay longer than I originally intended.


Avalon Island - A lush, beautiful, tropical island that is every bit the paradise that its name implies. Home to a very calm ecosystem, the island is one of the safest places in the known universe, a stark contrast to the eat-and-be-eaten jungles of Felarya. The island is formed from an ancient, collapsed volcano, forming a giant crescent shape around an enormous bay that serves as safe harbor for military and merchant ships alike.

Avalon City - A technological utopia situated near the center of Avalon Island. The city is built entirely of polished metal and glass, maintained in its entirety by robotic support and maintenance systems. The tropical sun makes it glitter from a distance, yet its edges blend effortlessly with the surrounding foliage, as if the city simply belongs there. If there could be said to be a perfect place to live, this is it.

Avalon Multiversal Security Collective - The organization that built Avalon City, the Avalon Multiversal Security Collective (commonly known simply as 'Avalon') is entirely based on interdimensional transit. Having perfected travel between universes, they use this technology to gather other technologies from other universes for study and reverse engineering, which they then redesign for their own use. Most Avalon technology was originally acquired this way, however it has been heavily modified since, usually by combining it with magic, and no longer bears much resemblance to the original. Avalon considers themselves an 'interdimensional police force' that protects less advanced worlds from being wiped out by another powerful race. Many worlds have developed a means to travel to other universes, and Avalon keeps close watch on them all.

Sentinels - Avalon's elite field agents. The Sentinels possess a wide range of abilities, from diplomacy, to reconnaissance, to front-line combat. Sentinels are a diverse group of many races from many worlds, but all are powerful, highly trained individuals. They are recruited from various universes Avalon travels to, and most of them posses some kind of special ability or talent not seen in the rest of the population.

Dimensional Rift Generator - The mainstay of Avalon technology, there are currently two models, both utilize an amazing blend of magic and machinery. The 'Core' DRG in the heart of Avalon City is capable of opening a sustained portal to any spot in any universe with pinpoint precision. Starship-mounted DRG's are much less accurate, capable of carrying the ship to another universe, but may arrive up to 100 light-years from the target destination. Typically, spacefold drives take over at this point for the remainder of the trip.

Personal Recall Device - Standard issue equipment for any Sentinel deployed to another universe. This device acts as a homing beacon for the Core DRG, allowing Avalon to open a window for the Sentinel to return. The PRD is vital, if it is lost or destroyed, the Sentinel must find another way to establish communication with Avalon. If this proves impossible, the Sentinel may be stranded. Such individuals are normally labeled as missing and assumed dead, and the universe they were lost in is marked as hazardous.

Raith - Raith abandoned everything to become a Sentinel. He had his own memory wiped, and all records of his previous existence have been erased from all official records. He remembers nothing of his past, not even his name, and there are few who do. Only a few fragments of his memory survived the process, and they still haunt him in his dreams with unknown horrors he would rather keep forgetting.
Raith has a strong innate telekinetic ability, though he does not have much precision control over it. He is capable of generating very powerful bursts of kinetic energy, and can easily throw large objects or produce powerful shockwaves, but more delicate tasks are beyond his abilities. He is capable of focusing immense amounts of power into a single blast, but doing so drains his energy very quickly, and it can take days or sometimes weeks for him to recharge from such an outburst.

Thera - A giant sea naga, though she was born for the sea, she finds herself equally at home on land. She has long black hair which she prefers to keep tied in a loose ponytail, deep green eyes, and black scales with rivulets of green throughout her tail.
She normally stands just shy of 70 feet head-to-ground, and has a very long tail. Her tail alone is over 200 feet in length (head-to-tail Thera is nearly 280 feet long) and narrows to a thin, whiplike point. She is amazingly dextrous with the tip of her tail, especially given her size, and can use it to handle tinies just as easily as it grabs humans.
She swims via a single, long fin that runs down the length of her tail, the spines of which also serve as a formidable weapon against other predators. This fin can lay flat when she is on land, so as not to interfere with her movement.
She can make her saliva poisonous, but lacks a mechanism to spit it long distances, instead preferring to inject it by biting her target. The venom impedes the victim's nervous system, slowing their movements and reactions, and in high enough doses can cause complete paralysis. She will sometimes coat her tail spines with this toxin if she is expecting a fight.
She is very intelligent, and employs a wide variety of tactics to trap her prey, many of which involve her tail, which is often mistaken for a vine or smaller snake at first sight. Despite her aquatic nature, she has no trouble climbing trees, and often does so to lie in wait for passing prey. She likes to play with her food using her long tongue, which she can control just as well as her tail.
Although she finds humans quite delectable, she has a certain respect for them, and is far more likely to release a human than others of her race. She prefers not to eat newcomers to Felarya who are ignorant of the danger, and will often help them get to a safer place. Of course she may eat them anyways if she's hungry enough for her instincts to take over. A girl's gotta eat, you know.
As long as she isn't hungry she is quite safe to be around, and will occasionally travel with adventurers for a while, as she enjoys talking with them about their latest finds. While traveling with such a group, she will often defend them against other predators, and once even smacked Crisis for trying to make a meal out of a human family she was escorting. Unlike most naga, Thera tends to wear clothing, mostly due to her contact with humans.
She has an obsession with magical trinkets, constantly carrying her collection in a pouch around her neck, and it is quite easy to barter for your life if you have something that interests her. Of course this also means she may attack if she knows your party happens to be carrying something fascinating, but you may survive if you give up the cargo without a fight.
Her hobby has led her to have a bit of a love-hate relationship with Subeta, as she will often pass along any items she becomes bored with, but jealously guards anything that still holds her interest. She also gets along well with Anna, who has a positive view of Thera's tendency to help humans, though this same tendency rather annoys Crisis. Thera is quite interested by the bits of technology Anna works on, even though she has no idea how they work.
Thera travels a lot, not truly calling any one place 'home'. While she normally stays either in central Felarya or the Topazial Sea, it is not uncommon for her to wander far from these areas in search of a rumored artifact.
She possesses some magical ability of her own, but rarely uses it, preferring instead to activate the powers of the items in her collection if magical assistance is needed. There are many rumors about the mystic powers of the artifacts Thera carries, but it is unclear how many of them are true.


There you have it! Please, give me your thoughts. Feel free to be harsh if need be, after all I whipped more than half of this up on the spot, so I'm not expecting it to be the greatest thing ever or anything. The only thing here I'm set on if Thera, Ruin is supposed to be the main character, but he's not that developed as of yet. In case you're wondering, Avalon itself is an idea I've had swimming around in my head for long before I stumbled upon Felarya. Of course Felarya's dimensionally unstable nature made me feel the two worlds would fit nicely together. Unfortunately that means most of this would just be backstory, so I may have gotten a little carried away with it. Oh well.
Of course all people, places, and organizations listed here are entirely spontaneous products of my imagination (except for Crisis, Anna, Subeta, and all locations in Felarya. Those are Karbo's of course.) any resemblance to reality is coincidental. (I think I'm supposed to say something like that, right?)


Edit: Cut out a bunch of junk that I no longer plan on using. Added a bit more to Ruin and Thera's bios.



I'd better stop now before this gets any longer...

That's an interesting setting and race you imagined here ^^
Of course it brings some questions, like how they get the energy to run their city and so.
Also are they situated near the continent ? because if it's an island that is a complete heaven and in the middle of the sea, it makes a bit hard to see how it is related to Felarya I think ^^;
I'm looking forward to see where it wil go

Avalon isn't part of Felarya at all, it's on a different planet in a different universe (sorry, looks like I missed that rather important detail). However, they have recently discovered the existence of this small, unstable dimensional pocket and are soon to send someone to investigate it, not yet knowing the hazards within...

The city is powered primarily by several large fusion plants. Being an island on a planet that is 98% water, they have a near-infinite supply of seawater from which to extract hydrogen fuel. I could give far more details, and maybe I will in the story, as Avalon is a much more fleshed-out world in my mind than what I have written here. It's just mostly irrelevant for now.

oh ok then ^^

More new characters!

Sill - Hyperactive genius girl with a ridiculous IQ despite her childish personality. She basically designed most of Avalon's interdimensional rift technology, and is now in charge of the entire machine. She's the only person who truly understands how the DRG works, and if you ask you for an explanation, she'll be very very very happy to oblige. You'll probably just end up more confused in the end though. She also handles dimensional communications from Sentinel teams. She essentially lives in the DRG control room, and is rarely seen elsewhere.

Jen - An enigmatic Sentinel with a cold, calculating mind. Jen doesn't speak much except when absolutely necessary, or if she is irritated, which happens easily. She values precision above all else, and anything that interferes with her meticulously crafted plans tends to greatly annoy her. On the battlefield she is brutal, efficient, and unsympathetic. She removes all traces of emotion from her mind during a fight, and is often viewed as a merciless killing machine by friend and foe alike. Due to this, she is often deployed alone, and there are few who even know what abilities she possesses.

Myrth - A typical giant mermaid, living a carefree life deep in the Topazial Sea. She rarely encounters humans, and has never eaten one, preferring a stable diet of fish instead. She is an old friend of Thera, who visits Myrth whenever she is in the neighborhood.

Finished the first two chapters. I'm posting them under a new topic. Just a note, I changed the main character's name to Raith.

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