My stories and characters

Great chapter ^_^

I really loved what you did with Lohal's personnality and the way he sees Felarya
and Palaye Ftw ! XD

Hehe... Thanks. Palaye didn't do much in this chapter, but she was useful when needed.

It's one of your strengths – the character didn't do much but the little things she does truly stand out. Also, Rajan being so excitable next to Palaye's relative calm is funny at times, even if it’s unintentional. I can imagine so many things those two could get into later on.

Palaye/Rajan highlights:

• Her warning the humans to be quiet - sensible advice they all too often ignore to their own peril. At some point, Rajan will probably come to realize this fully (I hope).
  
• Rajan placing himself between the neko and Palaye when they threatened her. He would have done this with any of the survivors, but the fact that he is treating Palaye no differently than the humans says a lot about his character and hers.
  
• The two staying together when the nekos were escorting the survivors to the prison encampment. That was seen through the eyes of Nishti in a single line of text, but it speaks volumes.
  
• Palaye's reaction after the harpy attack.
  
• And finally, her knocking down the neko guard at the end, which very likely saved someone from getting killed. As I said in the DA comment – go Palaye!

As you said, it’s not a lot. Even in the previous stories, she’s not a major character. However, the things she does make her a solid, and in my view at least, very likable, interesting character. I wouldn’t mind knowing more about her back-story, even if it only occurs in brief snippets.

timing2 wrote:

Also, Rajan being so excitable next to Palaye's relative calm is funny at times, even if it’s unintentional.

Rajan is pretty much out of his depth. Whereas Palaye, though she's on unfamiliar territory, grew up learning how to adapt and survive. Rajan may not be the best person to lead the survivors, and he knows it. It weighs on him. He's an airline pilot, after all, not a survival guide.

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I can imagine so many things those two could get into later on.

Heh. They're getting closer. We'll have to see whether they survive, though. Given where they're heading...

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Palaye/Rajan highlights:
[*]Her warning the humans to be quiet - sensible advice they all too often ignore to their own peril. At some point, Rajan will probably come to realize this fully (I hope).

He needs to become more authoritarian, I think, and drill a few basics into the survivors' heads.

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[*]Rajan placing himself between the neko and Palaye when they threatened her. He would have done this with any of the survivors, but the fact that he is treating Palaye no differently than the humans says a lot about his character and hers.

Yes, it probably does. He did it almost without thinking, too.

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[*]The two staying together when the nekos were escorting the survivors to the prison encampment. That was seen through the eyes of Nishti in a single line of text, but it speaks volumes.

They're sticking together. It started out as a practical measure. He was the survivors' leader, and she was the advisor, so naturally he was the person she would speak to the most. But little by little they've genuinely come to respect and like each other, despite some hesitation still (Rajan, obviously, isn't happy with the fact that she eats people, while Palaye remains dubious about his ability to adapt to Felarya).

One reason why Rajan stayed with her while they were being led to detention was to make sure the nekos didn't threaten her again. And by doing so, of course, he was no longer walking in the lead of the group.

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[*]And finally, her knocking down the neko guard at the end, which very likely saved someone from getting killed. As I said in the DA comment – go Palaye!

Hehe...

Yes, she probably did save someone there.

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As you said, it’s not a lot. Even in the previous stories, she’s not a major character. However, the things she does make her a solid, and in my view at least, very likable, interesting character. I wouldn’t mind knowing more about her back-story, even if it only occurs in brief snippets.

Thanks. She's not going to get a chapter of her own, but maybe we will learn a little bit more about her. I don't know yet; it'll depend on how it might fit in with the rest of the story.

Have faith in Palaye, she's a survivor!

The concern will be Rajan, who is likely to get himself killed while futilely trying to save someone else. That I can see happening all too easily.

Not sure whether to post in this forum or in the other one, but...

I may not have Internet access during the first three weeks of August. I've been working on chapter 9 of Lost in Felarya, but I doubt I'll get it finished by tomorrow. So, when I return, I'm hoping to:
* continue with Lost in Felarya;
* get started on a little adventure for Vuni;
* write about Milly, and how she's coping with her temporary humanless diet.

All coming... when I have time.

Just managed to find time to finish this. Chapter 9 of Lost in Felarya is up on Eka's. (I won't have time to add it to DA for now.)

http://aryion.com/g3/showitem.php?id=174803

In the first of several ideas bobbing around my brain, here's the beginning of a new story about Vuni, my lovely little slug girl:

http://aryion.com/g3/showitem.php?id=175952

As always, it will be up on dA also, when I have time.

Something simple but perhaps a little bit different to my usual stories:
"The Dridder & the Naga"

(Yes, I'm going soppy. So sue me. )

A bit of silliness (for a change), inspired by a Karbo comic, and featuring Milly.

"Angel and Demon"

Your creative side still impresses me FS, nice entries

Thanks. Which reminds me, I need to update that first post.

A new, short story. Up on Eka's for now; I'll also be uploading it on dA shortly.

http://aryion.com/g3/showitem.php?id=177475

Vuni's story, continued:

http://frenchsnack.deviantart.com/art/Story-33-part-2-139509470

Something a bit different here. Read it to find out.

Excellent chapter here !

Very nice work on Vuni's emotions and her adaptation to this totally foreign environment ( loved the moveable piece of woode remark XD )
This is very touching and really well written.
She's really an attaching character, I wish she'll make it back to Tiasha ^__^

Thank you! Among my own characters, I think Vuni is becoming one of my favourite; I enjoy writing for her. I'll probably have the next part up by the time you come back from China. (Have a good trip!)

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Thank you! Among my own characters, I think Vuni is becoming one of my favourite; I enjoy writing for her. I'll probably have the next part up by the time you come back from China. (Have a good trip!)

I'm glad to hear that. It's hard to believe where she had story her beginnings - as nameless naga food.

timing2 wrote:

I'm glad to hear that. It's hard to believe where she had story her beginnings - as nameless naga food.

Yes, I'm indebted to Zoekin for creating her... sort of. Imagine, if Katrika had digested her instead of throwing her up, we would never have had the "Vuni adventures".

Vuni's story, part 3:
http://aryion.com/g3/showitem.php?id=178131

I'll be putting it on dA too later.

Milly's story continues:

http://frenchsnack.deviantart.com/art/Story-39-141124007

(Don't worry; I'm not abandoning Vuni. I've got the end of Vuni's story in mind, but I felt more inspired to move Milly's forward first.)

Another, fairly brief story. With Isham, Milly (briefly), Malika, and Safe Harbour (Jade mentioned but not seen this time):
http://aryion.com/g3/showitem.php?id=179372

I'll probably upload it on dA too tomorrow.

Great to see more of Milly and Isham ^_^
Youy did a really nice job at describing their sentiments after the separation, the feeling an loss and unease.
And I'm not her creator but I think you did an excellent job at capturing Malika's personnality right too

Thank you! Malika was fun to write about. And Isham and Milly are both going to have to do some soul-searching...

And now for something short, and slightly different...

Remember Selima, the little grass naga? No? Well that's ok, because she doesn't remember what happened to her either. Someone's about to tell her, though...

http://frenchsnack.deviantart.com/art/Story-42-144227436

A story centred on Jissy (and Roshan):

http://aryion.com/g3/showitem.php?id=180374

I'll upload it on dA as well later, probably tomorrow.