- JohnDoe wrote:
- You might want to break those big blocks of text up into paragraphs, its kind of hard to read the story if you don't.
Yeah I'm going to finalize it by correcting any grammar errors and stuff once I finish. It's more or less a rough draft pf the story and once I correct it all I'm going to post it on DA (under the same username). But until then I've got some food to eat (no nekos).
Finally I'm done with my homework!!
Well now that that's out of the way I can finally post my next chapter of my story!
Ugh... so cold... everything's slowly going numb I thought as I journeyed through the endless snowy desert. "Th-th-there it is..." I said, my teeth chattering. "Th-th-th-th-the T-t-t-temple's just up ahead."
After all this... it's finally time... I can't give in now! Not after coming this far. I thought. I snuck up to the temple and slipped inside.
It's warmer than I thought it'd be in here I thought. I snuck down the halls quickly and carefully to come to the prayer chamber once again.
"So you arrive. I never thought you'd survive that dryad... perhaps you truly are the legendary hero." A voice said. "But you shan't defeat me. For nice ones always finish last." It continued.
The demon queen! She must be using telpathy! I thought.
"Indeed I am. I cannot let you know my location." The queen continued.
What?! She reads minds?! "Indeed I do. Now then it's time for your long journey to end!!" The ominous queen said as a ball of darkness issued forth from the crystal. I dodged it with ease and was met by a sharp, stabbing pain in my back.
"AGH!! I got... stabbed... I'm...so...useless!!" I said as I laid on the floor, tears welling up in my eyes. A shadowy figure emerged from the crystal and raised me by my arms.
"That you are. You seriously thought you could defeat me, the queen of evil? You are foolhardy to have deluded yourself with such fantasies." She said.
Ugh...as much as I hate to admit she's right... I'm a wimp and I always have been... not even magic can change that... I thought.
"I'm glad you see it my way. Now you die." She said eerily as she dropped me to the floor and issued forth a gigantic dark sword from her crystal.
I guess this is the end... Crisis... Anna... Lissa... I let everyone down. Just as I have everyone else that's ever counted on me... I'm a fool to believe that I could save the Multiverse... it's all I ever was... a fool... I thought accepting my grim fate.
"Don't give up... let your loved ones be your strength..." A voice issued from my head. The powerful queen pulled back her sword and swung at me. "DON'T GIVE UP!!" The voice said.
At that moment I opened my eyes and in a tremendous feat of strength, agility, and sheer will I narrowly dodged the deadly blade leaving a gruesome wound on my arm.
"HOW IS THAT POSSIBLE?! YOU DODGED MY SWORD THROUGH SHEER WILL?!" The Queen said, completely baffled. I was huffing and puffing from the injuries I sustained "I suppose... such is the will of a 'fool'. Heh... I guess you were foolish to think that I'd go down so easily! I haven't even seen my fair share of the world and I'm not about to let you wreck it!!" I said.
"Even so you have sustained some rather deadly injuries. You barely have five minutes to do anything before your injuries catch up with you." The Queen retorted.
"Well then I'll finish you in four!" I retorted back at her, grasping my arm. "Firaga!!" I encanted, issuing forth a gigantic fireball to the dreadful queen. She simply put out her finger and absorbed the fireball into her body.
HOW IS THAT POSSIBLE?!?! SHE ABSORBED LEVEL 3 MAGIC WITH NO EFFORT AT ALL!! WHAT THE HELL IS GOING ON?!?! I mused looking things over.
"Now you taste your defeat. FIRAGAGA!!" The queen encanted issuing a swirling vortex of fire at me. I closed my eyes and prepared for the worst and waited a minute feeling no more than what I already was. "Tyler... are you... okay?" A voice asked. I opened my eyes to see a blonde human sized naga directly in front of me and severly blackened. "CRISIS!! YOU SHOULDN'T HAVE GOTTEN PAST MY BARRIER!!" I scolded.
"I'm... sorry... I had to... make sure you were... okay... though I leave... here... I'll never forget... the fun I had traveling with you... goodbye... Tyler..." She said. My naga friend collapsed iin front of me and tears welled up in my eyes and likewise with anger.
"CRISIS!!!!" I rushed to Crisis's side as tears burst from my eyes. "You... you killed... one of my best friends... one of the few who actually care about me... and for that... YOU'RE FINISHED!!!!!!! BY THE TIME I'M DONE WITH YOU YOU WON'T EVEN BE A SPIRIT!!!!!!!! I'LL ANNIHILATE YOU!!!!!!! YOU'LL BE SO LONG GONE THAT THE PEOPLE YOU KILLED WILL FEEL SORRY FOR YOU!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!" I screamed. As anger welled up inside me I felt a strange power. One that I've never felt before.
A firey red aura surrounded me. "WH-WHAT'S GOING ON?! HE'S GAINING TREMEMDOUS AMOUNTS OF ENERGY!! AT THE RATE HE'S GOING HE'LL HAVE THE POWER OF OVER NINE THOUSAND SUNS!! NOT EVEN I COULD STAND UP TO THAT MUCH POWER!!!!" The Queen analyzed seeming very frightened.
"FIRAGAJA!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!" I encanted with all my might, banishing the dreadful Queen of Darkness beyond the Hell hole she crawled out of. I was gasping, wheezing, and coughing up a storm at that time. "I... I did it... I banished the Queen of Darkness..." I stated looking at the pile of ash on the floor. I collapsed and began to cry.
"But... Crisis is... dead... I could've saved her... I could've prevented her from coming... I could've protected her... WHY DID I HAVE TO LET MY FREAKING GUARD DOWN?!?! IF I HADN'T HAVE RECITED THAT SPELL CRISIS WOULD STILL BE ALIVE!!! Why? Why does fate hate me so... I'D GLADLY GIVE MY LIFE TO BRING HER BACK!!! I'D SELL MY SOUL!! ANYTHING TO BRING MY FRIEND BACK!!!" I mused wailing and coughing.
"WHY?! WHY DID IT HAVE TO BE HER?!?! Why?" I continued still kicking myself.
"Are you... okay?" A faint voice called.
"Yeah I am... unfortunately..." I called weakly back to the voice. And in came my friends Lissa and Anna.
"What happened in here?! It looks like a twister caught fire and tore this place to smithereens!" Lissa remarked. "Wait! Is that... Crisis?!" Anna gasped. I gulped.
"It's her... body at least..." I said not having the courage to look into their faces.
"Crisis is... dead?!" Lissa asked.
"Y-yeah... she sacrificed herself to save me... if only I hadn't let my guard down... she'd still be alive..." I explained. "I'M SO USELESS!! I CAN SAVE THE MULTIVERSE BUT I CAN'T SAVE A SINGLE PERSON!!! EVERY TIME!!! EVERY FREAKING TIME!!! EVERY TIME SOMEONE GIVES ME SOME SORT OF RESPONSIBILITY I LET SOMEONE IMPORTANT DOWN!!!" I yelled beggining to kick myself again.
"But at least... I'll see her again soon..." I continued.
"What?! What do you mean by that?!" Lissa gasped.
"I got too heavily injured... I suffered a fatal injury and soon I'm going to die. But don't try to save me... At this point I can't be saved. Not now..." I explained. "I'm glad to have met you all... my only regret is that I'll never see my home again... or the family I helped create... goodbye..." I said shedding a single tear.
"No... it can't be... why now... he had so much to go back to... why?!?!" Lissa shouted beginning to wail. Anna started to cry as well.
"He was annoying but he saved us all... and he grew on me so much... and Crisis... she's the only reason I'm alive today... why did they have to go?!" She wailed.
Ugh... where am I? Is this it? Is this the afterlife? And why do I hear Lissa and Anna? I wondered. My eyes popped open and I began to rise. I turned to Crisis and saw that she was awakening as well. "I'm... alive?" She wondered.
"CRISIS!!" I shouted with glee as I rushed over to her and gave her a big hug.
"YOU'RE ALIVE!!! HALLELUJAH!!" Lissa shouted as she turned turned the hug into a group hug.
"Humph... at least that's over with... it was way too much drama having
Crisis around let alone her clone." Anna expressed.
"Oh come on!! I knew you were crying! We all know! You don't have to play tough." Lissa said as she continued to squeeze the heck out of me and Crisis.
"I wasn't crying! I had something in my eye..." Anna stated dryly. So here ends my adventures in Felarya.
Well what do you think of it? Like it? Love it? Tell me about it. And also keep a sharp eye out for the sequel!
Yay my story's done! Now I can get to work on the sequel. I'll have a thread for the bios up soon. See ya!