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PostSubject: The Many Bios of the Man They Call Aisu   The Many Bios of the Man They Call Aisu Icon_minitimeMon Dec 21, 2009 8:45 pm

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PostSubject: Re: The Many Bios of the Man They Call Aisu   The Many Bios of the Man They Call Aisu Icon_minitimeMon Dec 21, 2009 9:05 pm

Hmm. Interesting start to a character. Aisu seems interesting, since he has absolutely no qualms with killing other humans. What lead him to adopt such a cynical world view?

You have a fairly good grasp on her feeding habits, but do you have any more ideas on her personality in general? What sort of relationship does she have with Aisu.

For ideas on where she may live, check out the wiki, specifically the locations page. There's a great map on that page.

http://felarya.com/wiki/index.php?title=Category:Locations

As far for cold and desolate, that's a bit less common on the warm Felarya, but there are areas. Frost Peak is very cold in it's upper heights and I'd assume that on the far side of the Miratan base there is a low population. The Imoreith Tundra is a much larger zone to the North West and its implied there are colder places beyond it. It's not very well documented at all and is difficult to get to from central Felarya - but hey, any development is encouraged if its well thought out.

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PostSubject: Re: The Many Bios of the Man They Call Aisu   The Many Bios of the Man They Call Aisu Icon_minitimeMon Dec 21, 2009 9:07 pm

Yeah, I'll probably poke around my original post with the Edit Button. I should work on their relationship, and hell, I could easily make a bio for Aisu himself.
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PostSubject: Re: The Many Bios of the Man They Call Aisu   The Many Bios of the Man They Call Aisu Icon_minitimeMon Dec 21, 2009 9:12 pm

Well, no character just springs out fully formed. Building a deep, interesting character who is enjoyable to read about or watch takes time.

However, you've at least stuck to the guidelines for character creation which is a good start. Very Happy
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PostSubject: Re: The Many Bios of the Man They Call Aisu   The Many Bios of the Man They Call Aisu Icon_minitimeMon Dec 21, 2009 9:55 pm

I edited it, I might play with Aisu's bio some more, but I'll see what others think so that I may improve this as much as possible~
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PostSubject: Re: The Many Bios of the Man They Call Aisu   The Many Bios of the Man They Call Aisu Icon_minitimeTue Dec 22, 2009 8:42 am

Aisu seems a bit over powered. The part about binding predators to not waste time fighting them suggests that he can bind them quickly. Binding a 60ft (or thereabouts) predator shouldn't be a quick and easy thing, in my opinon.

As for eating faeries...

This brings a bit from what I said above, binding a fairy shouldn't be an easy thing. Even if he managed to do it, that doesn't make the fairy shrink to an edible size and neither does damaging their wings.

Also, why would he? Does his hate/indifference to humanity also extend to anything humanoid? It doesn't appear to since he fell in love with a naga, a species that is humanoid (to an extent).

I only have one thing to critique with Ruby; the magic absorbing areas on her tail. Only one other naga has an ability like that, Zoekin's Katrika. Katrika isn't naitive to Felarya and to my knowledge no native naga species has an ability like that.
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PostSubject: Re: The Many Bios of the Man They Call Aisu   The Many Bios of the Man They Call Aisu Icon_minitimeTue Dec 22, 2009 9:24 am

Alright, I'll take your critique into mind. Surprised

I shouldn't right anymore when I'm tired, I leave all kinds of holes.

Ironically, binding magic was my way of trying to avoid being overpowered, but that backfired x.x I'll try my best to tone it town and make it more plausible.

As for the fairies, I don't want him to be this great menace feared by all fairies. He rarely attempts it, doesn't attack every fairy he meets. When he does, it's from a hiding place, on fairies he's confident are especially weak or unintelligent and are at a manageable size already. Sorry if I made it sound like anything otherwise, but if that's still a bit much, I don't want to make him too generic.

As for his misanthropy bleeding into other races... You got me, that's the one thing I'm facepaling at myself over the most. Once I can think of something, I'll update the bio right away o__o

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PostSubject: Re: The Many Bios of the Man They Call Aisu   The Many Bios of the Man They Call Aisu Icon_minitimeThu Dec 24, 2009 8:10 pm

Hmm... I like how you've developed it. Human characters who are friends with active predators are always interesting, the best example being Lea. They all have their own reasons for not caring, or ways of dealing with/avoiding the issue.

I also like Aisu a bit less powered. It makes him need Ruby more, if simply for her size and strength, while she needs him for his magic and cunning.

Its really nice to see someone who actually is committed to developing a character and takes it seriously. Unlike... others who don't seem to care or know what Felarya is.

How close do they live to the tundra? On it? I was just reading what Karbo had down for the Imoreith Tundra on the wiki and it mentions strange alterations to sound. Does this resonance make it easier for Ruby to sense prey? Does Aisu use some sort of magic to make her and him move quieter? Or do they stick to lands lower than the tundra.

Also, in such a far corner of Felarya, what is the mainstay of her diet? I know that in the north of Elifga valley, there are various tribes of Elves. (I know this because I created it. Razz ) Elves seem to have more female individuals, like most native Felaryan species, though that could be just a skewed perspective. (Warning though - alot of those tasty elves in that part of the world are nasty lightening mages. Better be prepared. Wink )


Here's some links to the general areas.

http://felarya.com/wiki/index.php?title=Imoreith_Tundra

https://felarya.forumotion.com/new-ideas-f2/elifga-valley-t1088.htm
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PostSubject: Re: The Many Bios of the Man They Call Aisu   The Many Bios of the Man They Call Aisu Icon_minitimeThu Dec 24, 2009 8:19 pm

Ruby hunts outside the tundra, bringing Aisu with her to help out. I might need to think of where exactly, though. The woods around the tundra aren't as developed as I would've hoped. What kind of races/animals would be prevalent in the wooded areas east of the tundra?
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PostSubject: Re: The Many Bios of the Man They Call Aisu   The Many Bios of the Man They Call Aisu Icon_minitimeThu Dec 24, 2009 8:22 pm

One thing to remember is the reason the tundra is so drastically colder is because it is at a higher elevation. (That's why its much colder than areas of similar latitude, say, for example, deeper Felarya.

Elifga Valley, a boreal area, is developed. The other places, more direct to the east... well, they're not really well known at all.

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PostSubject: Re: The Many Bios of the Man They Call Aisu   The Many Bios of the Man They Call Aisu Icon_minitimeThu Dec 24, 2009 8:32 pm

This is gonna bother me all night. I guess the Valley could be where Ruby and Aisu hunt. I intend Ruby to mainly eat whatever humanoids she can effectively capture, except for elves due to their magical prowess. Ya know, I'll add that extra info to her Feeding Habits.

Well, I'm not sure now... There isn't any small game in the Valley for Aisu to hunt, is there? I may need to relocate them... x.x
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Eh, I'd have her eat the elves. Only a few are really as proficient as I say. And could Aisu's magic be more defensive perhaps? Protecting her from such things? The elves are plentiful in the north part of the valley and she'd be in no real danger as long as she stayed away from their settlement.

-And being a boreal forest there is alot of small game, mainly duikers, which are like small tasty deer.
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PostSubject: Re: The Many Bios of the Man They Call Aisu   The Many Bios of the Man They Call Aisu Icon_minitimeThu Dec 24, 2009 8:39 pm

Alright, I didn't intend on Aisu having overly defensive magic, but I'll give him some, not sure to what extent, though.

I looked over your thread again. Could Aisu effectively hunt Duikers?
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Well, they are pretty sneaky and fast. But if he's used to survival I'm sure he could set traps for them.
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Well, Aisu was a guerrilla fighter, so... yep, I think he could pull it off.

I assume the valley isn't that wooded? It looks pretty plain on the map.
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Well... its actually pretty wooded. Though it is more with normal size trees than the massive ones on the rest of Felarya. Its like a boreal pine forest as well, unlike the hot jungle.
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Oooh, I like the sound of that. Trees work very well for Aisu. I'll add more tomorrow when I feel less tired. If there are berries, fruit, etc. and/or occasional merchant caravans, it'd be very ideal.
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Fruit I'm not so sure on but berries would be plentiful. The Valley also happens to be the only way to get from the other parts of Felarya to the cold higher Tundra - so anyone wanting to go there has to pass through. Maybe not so much big merchant caravans but a good number of independent adventurers. The elves probably also run merchant caravans being local.
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Awesome! I've decided that a big part of Aisu's character is his need for various spices and herbs (and expensive and exquisite treats) from merchants. Berries, too. Aisu likes his fruits.
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PostSubject: Re: The Many Bios of the Man They Call Aisu   The Many Bios of the Man They Call Aisu Icon_minitimeWed Jan 13, 2010 10:28 am

Just a bump to let you know that I'm still working to perfect this bio. :3

I love comments and criticisms, so dig deep!
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PostSubject: Re: The Many Bios of the Man They Call Aisu   The Many Bios of the Man They Call Aisu Icon_minitimeSat Feb 13, 2010 9:42 am

Bumping this to remind you that I'm still always improving on this!
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PostSubject: Re: The Many Bios of the Man They Call Aisu   The Many Bios of the Man They Call Aisu Icon_minitimeMon Feb 22, 2010 6:19 pm

Added Mini-Bios for Tarina and Stark
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PostSubject: Re: The Many Bios of the Man They Call Aisu   The Many Bios of the Man They Call Aisu Icon_minitimeFri Apr 09, 2010 5:59 pm

RUBY AND AISU'S BIOS WERE REWRITTEN

The gist of it is the same, but I just changed the wording and a few details.
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PostSubject: Re: The Many Bios of the Man They Call Aisu   The Many Bios of the Man They Call Aisu Icon_minitimeFri May 14, 2010 12:01 pm

Fixed a few typos here and there and added to Tarina and Stark's nano-bios. ^^;
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PostSubject: Re: The Many Bios of the Man They Call Aisu   The Many Bios of the Man They Call Aisu Icon_minitimeTue Jun 01, 2010 8:31 am

Finally got around to adding Olive here. Feel free to take the proverbial axe to her bio; it's largely unpolished right now.
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