Nyaha's Various Characters and Creatures

Here's another one.

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did you get permission to use anko in that way?

Nyaa, oops. T.T I need to take it out then, huh?

But other than that, is that really all you have to say? D: Kinda lame.

hmmm... Mir is very mary sue and pretty overpowered and you seem to have used a lot characters that aren't yours... do you have permission to use, Crisis, Alvar, Temi, Lily and Cerberus S.E.L.???

as for elk. there is no mention of nekos hating water in general. some of them might, but it's not something common for among the race. (real life cat's doesn't hate water either you know. if i remember it right, it's something about the sudden temperature differences that annoy them.)other than that and you using anko without approval. he doesn't really catch my interest... he's pretty plain and boring...

these are just my opinions though.

Nya, I don't know about permission, but I really hope I'm not hurting anybody by mentioning those characters. D:

Thank you for your opinion, although I was really hoping for something more positive. :/ *sighs*

what i didn't mention i like... i'm not good at pointing out good stuff^^'

Nyuu, that's okay then. ^.^ 'Least you're not a hater. Although that "pointing out good stuff" might be something to work at. ;3 Just lemme know if you need tips! Nyaha's good at pointing out good stuff!

Reptillian wrote:

hmmm... Mir is very mary sue and pretty overpowered and you seem to have used a lot characters that aren't yours... do you have permission to use, Crisis, Alvar, Temi, Lily and Cerberus S.E.L.???

^ This.


Really.

Name: Naharou aka "Nyaha"
Species: Neko
Age: 18
Sex: Male
Height: 5'11"
Weight: 132 lbs
Fur Colour: Brown with white tips
Skin Colour: Fair
Hair Colour: Blond
Eye Colour: Green
Predation: Safe

-Appearance-
Nyaha is a neko boy who has a decent tan from getting lots of sun and wavy, fluffy, sandy-blond hair. His eyes are big and youthful, sporting a very kind green colour. The fur on his ears and tail is a healthy brown with white on the tips. The most noticeable thing about him, however, is the shirt he wears, which sports large sleeves which reach down past his knees. The shirt is green with white spots on the shoulders, collar, stomach, bottom edge, and the cuffs of the sleeves, and yellow lines connect the spots on the torso and encompass the cuffs. He also wears tan pants, and sandals on his feet.

-Personality-
Nyaha is a neko who loves to be silly and have fun. Though he loves to make friends and meet people. He is generally quite open about anything in his life. He's a kind person who likes to be helpful to others, but he tends to act before he thinks and often causes trouble for those around him, despite his good intentions. His impulsiveness and quick-thinking can get him out of tight situations, but they're also often the reason why he gets into those situations in the first place. He tries not to judge most people before he gets to know them, with the great exception of those who drink in his presence, as they remind him of his father. He takes offense whenever someone displays their prejudices around him, especially when they're directed at him. When he's in a bad mood, he tends to overreact to small things, and can get quite upset over nothing, though he always tries to apologize for the mistakes he makes when he gets this way. He is also prone to jealousy and capricious behavior. His naiive kindness can prove to be a double-edged sword, as it makes him easy to manipulate with the use of kind words and flattery. He is also quite a talented fisherman.

-Background-
As a child, Naharou was an extremely timid mama's boy growing up in Nekomura, who almost never strayed away from his loving mother. His mother taught him many things in their times together, such as not holding grudges against creatures for being who they are, or doing what comes naturally to them, and to appreciate people that are different from himself instead of shunning them. He lived a life with her alone, as his father was never around; instead he chose to hang out in Negav for the majority of Nyaha's life and drink with his buddies. Even so, Nyaha lived a happy, carefree life for twelve years, learning by his mom's side and inheriting most of her character traits. However, one day, while Nyaha was playing on the outskirts of Nekomura under the supervision of his mother, he came under attack by a group of three particularly vicious nagas, who attempted to attack him for pleasure, but his mother got between them and him and took their attack instead. After her passing away, Nyaha was left in tears. Even so, he wept for barely a day, because in his thoughts, his mother would have wanted him to be strong and to continue to live a happy life, so he attempted to pick himself up and be cheerful. The other nekos of the village became suspicious of this, and rumors started to spread that the reason he was able to cheer up so quickly was because it was he, himself, who was responsible for his mother's death. Shunned and outcast from the rest of the village, he suffered in loneliness for three months afterwards before meeting a neko girl who hadn't heard of nor cared about the rumors surrounding him, and the two became best friends. Through their time together, Nyaha learned how to be independent and confident. Three years after that, when his friend moved away from the village, he was determined not to fall back into his pit of loneliness, and after receiving a special gift from a strange elder of Nekomura, he set out to journey around Felarya and make friends with as many people as he could.

-Abilities-
Nyaha possesses an eccentrically creative mind, which seems to always be coming up with new ideas and connections between different ideas and objects. It is the main thing that has allowed him to survive in the wild by himself for so long. Along with that, his capricious nature, and his unique, over-sized sleeved shirt, which has been enchanted with dimensional magic that allows it to store a vast amount of objects inside the sleeves, his ability to surprise and confuse is what makes him dangerous. Among the items are his claw gauntlets - a pair of kataar-esque weapons with five thin, eight-inch long claws extending outwards from the knuckle - a pair of grappling claws - three-pronged mechanical claws attached to firing mechanisms by long, durable cables - smoke bombs, and a few extra pairs of sandals. He also keeps emergency supplies of food and water in his sleeves, various soaps for washing, and as much milk as he can get his hands on. Everything else, such as clothes, weapons, artifacts, potions-- what have you-- come and go through a process of finding, using, breaking, losing, giving and selling. Through his mind's eye, Nyaha can see inside the dimensional pocket connected to his sleeves. In order to use things he's stored in them, he must either find it with his mind's eye remember the location in the dimension of the item he wants to use. Nyaha isn't very tough physically, and it doesn't take very much to overpower him; he has a low pain threshold, and doesn't have much endurance, either. Nyaha does have agility, though; he is lightweight and has long limbs, and can climb and run quickly, and can move distances with ease with the use of his grappling claws. However, there is one huge drawback to his abilities: If he loses his shirt, either having it get stolen, torn apart, or burned, he'll lose all of his tools and become a lot less able overall.

FurryKurry wrote:

One day, Nyaha learned that his mother suffered from a heart condition, one that could prove its fatality at any time.

Nyaha was 15 years old. Some time afterwards, when a certain blond giant naga attacked Neko Village, Nyaha, in his own natural behavour, ended up distracting the large predator to the point that she forgot what she had come for and left.

Ok. apart from the fact that Felarya disables people from having heart conditions and such, and that you seemingly used crisis the wrong way(and maybe without consent from karbo)...
Nyaha is actually a pretty good character. His powers are not too overpowered and makes him have to rely a lot on cunning to survive.

I feel very relieved. ^^; I'll change those few things now.

I added Nyaha's wieght and changed his likes and dislikes slightly, and added other points. Also added notes on his diet. I plan to scrap Mir and Elk. Mir may be remade into a different character of the same name.

I'm thinking of a few new ideas now. I'd like to know what people thinks about this idea, and if anyone has any suggestions on it.

A young, short (maybe 4'-something) elf girl. She is very intelligent for her age, being able to understand concepts and topics that people generally don't think about until their late teens (such as dating, sex, and business). She can use her magic to control water, and usually creates large, muscular arms that mimic her movements to defend herself. Due to her size making everyone treat her like a child, she has developed a Napoleon complex, and often attacks travellers who think she's weak or harmless.

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okay, well I tend to not to like naming people with references to cliched manliness, or that would bring up similarities to anime characters (such as Kira/Light from deathnote of which everyone is aware probably).

Aside from that, Michael has a lot of weapons. knives aren't that much of a problem because you can carry them in socks, jackets, and such, but 3 katanas is a little over kill. Also the fact that you say he's kinda stupid makes me wonder how he's survived in felarya this whole time. It's an interesting idea you have though.

Can't really see anything wrong with Kira tho~

If you're planning on writing stories, shorter bios are reccommended, because you dont want to get to constricted to stay within the bounds that you already created for your chacter, since it's better to flesh out a character through writing than an actual bio.

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Aside from that, Michael has a lot of weapons. knives aren't that much of a problem because you can carry them in socks, jackets, and such, but 3 katanas is a little over kill.

This. It's more than overkill, it's just silly. There is no way someone is going to be carrying that much. That'll impede him far too much, he'll never use it all.

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If you're planning on writing stories, shorter bios are reccommended, because you dont want to get to constricted to stay within the bounds that you already created for your chacter, since it's better to flesh out a character through writing than an actual bio.

I disagree here. It depends on what part of the character you're fleshing out. Bios can be changed easily anyway.

Anime-Junkie wrote:

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If you're planning on writing stories, shorter bios are reccommended, because you dont want to get to constricted to stay within the bounds that you already created for your chacter, since it's better to flesh out a character through writing than an actual bio.

I disagree here. It depends on what part of the character you're fleshing out. Bios can be changed easily anyway.

and people like me who has a shitty memory, can use a fleshed out bios as a a good reminder.

Anime-Junkie wrote:

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Aside from that, Michael has a lot of weapons. knives aren't that much of a problem because you can carry them in socks, jackets, and such, but 3 katanas is a little over kill.

This. It's more than overkill, it's just silly. There is no way someone is going to be carrying that much. That'll impede him far too much, he'll never use it all.

It's supposed to be silly. ;3 You should get to know me better.

*EDIT: updated Michael's bio a smidge according to the feedback.

well, I recommend starting out with a smaller bio, it's nice to have stuff like tastes, common areas visiting, hobbies, favorite colors, etc, but it can get really unnecessary. If you start out small, you an always update the bio as you go along, but a bio should never be mixed with/used as a story, because a bio is a reference for a character. If you want to judge how unique or fleshed out a character is you want to look at how they're displayed in their own official stories and content. That's why video game companies rarely make absurdly long bios. (absurd = lots of pages).

That's what I decided to do this time, start out small and see what people think. Hell, maybe they'll never get any longer. :O

nah, as you RP and write about them, flesh out their bio's as you go...they'll become something amazing

Archmage_Bael wrote:

nah, as you RP and write about them, flesh out their bio's as you go...they'll become something amazing

Thanks, I will do that.

Updated Nyaha's appearance (clothes) and added that he loves chasing squirrels.

Name: Beryl
Race: Small Naga
Gender: Female
Age: 20
Height: 7''9"
Length: 43 ft
Skin tone: Fair
Hair Colour: Brown
Eye colour: Brown
Scale colour: Blue and red alternating bars
Underbelly Scales: Yellow
Predation: Opportunistic
Food Category: 1 inch to 7 feet; Favourite: Nekos

-Appearance-
Beryl is a colourful small naga, who can typically be found wandering Tolmeshal Forest. She has long, silky brown hair, smooth, fair skin, and observant brown eyes. The scales on her tail are coloured deep blue and deep red, forming bars of one after the other down the length of her tail, and her underbelly scales are a vibrant yellow. She can usually be found wearing a black beret on her head, and she carries a large brown bag of art supplies on a strap slung across her body, the bag resting at either her left or right hip. She wears nothing besides this, like most wild predators, which shows off her well-rounded breasts and her cute torso figure. Cup size CC.

-Personality-
Beryl is an artist who loves to paint things that catch her attention, which can range anywhere from people, even larger predators, to inanimate objects. Whenever she finds something that looks interesting, she'll get excited, often describing what she sees with artistic passion. Otherwise, she is a very gentle naga who cares greatly about those important to her. She likes things that stand out as unique or unusual, and usually makes paintings in their likeness. Beryl treasures everything she has in her life, from her friends, to the hat she wears, and any time she loses something, no matter how insignificant, she'll become very upset, often breaking into tears followed by a precisely focused anger which persists until she either retrieves what she lost, is comforted by someone she trusts, or is given an apology (which one of these will work best depends on what is lost). She carries around her art supplies everywhere she goes, as well as many of her favourite paintings to show off to people. When painting, she can become quite irritated if she can't get something to come out properly. She also hates being interrupted while she works. She is quite ditzy and scatterbrained, and has habits of forgetting things moments after they occur, or being oblivious to things that are rather obvious. This also sometimes makes her forget things about herself, and makes her come off as a hypocrite. She also doesn't have a lot of self-control, especially concerning her perverted wiles as a breast-lover.

-Background-
Beryl was born in a naga village hidden somewhere in the northern part of Tolmeshal Forest. Her mother, however, had been afflicted with a curse that affected her first born child, namely Beryl. The effects of the curse gave Beryl a birth defect that prevented her from keeping down live food, as any foreign movement inside her body activates an involuntary reaction that causes her to throw up all the contents of her stomach. The defect also prevented Beryl from producing poison to paralyze her prey, which made the problem much more significant. In order to stave off starvation, Beryl's parents decided she could only eat fruits, but unfortunately, there were not many growing in the vicinity of the village. During her childhood, Beryl attempted to eat a neera, but due to her condition, she was unable to do so. Sensing her distress, the neera took pity on her, and decided to take her on as his apprentice, teaching her a style of painting that only certain people could perform. Showing a talent for it straight away, Beryl became a very talented artist, and found that painting things took her mind off her yearning to eat what other nagas ate. In time, and through hard work and determination, she came to master this style of artistry, and through it, developed creativity and highly dexterous muscle control. Her proud mother, sensing a new hope for her child's life, gave Beryl a present that she found in the possession of a human she ate; a black beret that, according to the human, was something a lot of artists wear. Her neera teacher recognized her mastery of the craft and was also proud of Beryl, and taught her an extremely advanced style of art that incorporated magic. She came to grasp this magical artistry very well, becoming skilled at using her artistic ability to defend herself, and soon, even catch living prey (something which her teacher had mixed feelings about)! Eventually, Beryl decided that she wanted to travel around and find more and more interesting things to paint, and her parents knew that she was ready, and allowed her to leave the village, as long as she returned every so often to show them her paintings.

-Abilities-
Beryl is extremely coordinated, and is ambidextrous to boot. She is also able to think on a few different levels at a time, at least where her artistic work is concerned. She is naturally creative, and isn't afraid to take risks in her art. She is very talented in the style of painting her neera teacher taught her, called the "Three-Pronged Painting Arts", which involves using two brushes held in the hands, and one brush that connects to the tip of Beryl's tail. With this, she can paint high-quality paintings in mere minutes, which, in the dangers of Felarya's wild, is time well saved, as it allows her to paint, then leave the area before any predators catch on to her. Beryl is able to defend herself with her artistry, applying a magic ability that allows her to inflict targets with status effects using 'hex marks', which can either be painted directly on a target, on the ground or other such surface as a trap, or in the air to be thrown onto a target from afar. Her magic arts also allow her to bring simple drawings to life. Applying her creativity, she has also been able to invent a variety of physical combat maneuvers which make use of her coordination and precise muscle control. For example, a move she calls "Spring Tail Cannon" involves coiling her tail like a spring, then pushing outwards with all of her tail muscles at once to strike a target. She can also use her co-ordination to twist her tail around under her like a spring and use that to jump short distances. Her main defense against magic involves summoning painted objects to take the effects of spells in her place. She has no specific weaknesses, but she isn't very good at taking hits either physical or magical. Her magic has a number of drawbacks as well; hex marks last longest when painted directly on a target. If painted in the air and thrown or used as traps, they will become less effective the longer the time between their drawing and when they afflict a target. Objects and animals brought to life from drawings only last a certain length of time, which is shorter the more complex the drawing. They will also disappear if something collides with them.

-Diet-
Beryl likes to eat both tiny and human-sized prey alike, meaning nekos, humans, neeras, tomthumbs, etc. She is afflicted with a curse that causes her to regurgitate anything foreign that moves inside her body, so she must paralyze her prey with an effect sigil or knock it out using in a confrontation before eating it. Sometimes, she paints her more interesting-looking preys' pictures before eating them, and she's always willing to show them their picture if they ask. If desperate, she always has a fresh supply of fruits in her art bag if she needs it. Artists of any kind can easily escape being eaten by Beryl, for being an artist herself, she holds a great deal of respect for them. But she's no fool; if you claim to be one, she'll need to see some proof. Although, so much as a well-done drawing in the dirt will do to impress her. Beryl greatly enjoys a workout, and likes to be active. This means that any prey that makes the hunt hard for her will rise on her menu, as she feels that being able to earn her meals makes her a better person, and it also works up her appetite. Since nekos are generally more physically adept and more difficult to catch than other prey species, they are at the top of her menu.


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"It's like if I painted a picture of the perfect dragonapple hanging from a tree, grown naturally in the wilderness and left untouched by those who would erase its existence from the world. Being able to witness that sort of thing and sharing it with other people is what being an artist is all about!"